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turning away for reasons you wouldn't understand

you're still sitting in the dark
i thought i turned on the light
the sniper's about to hit his mark
you become a bird in flight

flying away to a broken home
you told me you life story
telling me things i've never known
shining in your mid-air glory

but how many pieces does it take
to fix this lost puzzle here
all the parts you find are fake
just like everyone you hold dear

so keep on running that way
until the sun finally rises
now she's seeing the light of day
there will be no more surprises

Author notes

Look, I rhymed. Hopeful and sad. What a combonation.

Have fun.
Written July 12th, 2004

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  • Miss Belligerence
    July 12, 2004
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    I really liked this. It's very very good! You are right that it is hopeful and sad at the smae time but while others might have not done so well at that you did wonderfully! I just really liked this.