If the skies fall down on me,
I will be a vacuum;
If the earth engulfs me,
I will erupt as a volcano;
If the sea chokes me,
I will become the waters itself;
If the fire surrounds me,
I will swallow them;
If the whole world spurts
sarcasm on me,
I will be the venom;
But if YOU desert me ,
My identity will cripple,
& I wont be able to
live on crutches.
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Written July 12th, 2004
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that was really good.. depth to it... and interesting comparisons.. what you would do/be if this happened.. nice job. very thought provoking.
nsh -
Curious ending.
If by Apurva suspicious ending poem where she composed in high degree expression but, in reality she only pretend it in words, but she knew what's truth in her last stanza. -
Aaaaaw... this is such a touchy poem... I didn't expect the way you concluded it...
mina -
applaudable
I relate to this poem completely-all of it-a small prayer for you -may your love never desert you ever
This is a brilliant poem
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Wonderful and clever! great work here!
Thanks for reviewing my poem too!
Take Care-TGR -
Lovely
Very interesting and vivid imagery too. Nice to see a little girl from our country writing here. Hope to see more of yours.
Love form India (Coimbatore) - Joel - -
AWW that's such a interesting and thought provoking poem. I liked how you compared it with earth disasters that you could over come, yet when it came to your love leaving you, you couldn't cope. Very unique and well written love poem. Well done
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