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The sex was good
But how good is good?
When yeses are shouldn'ts
And no's are shoulds
Her legs are long
And that's a plus
Cuz when I'm in her
She likes to cuss
She whispers dirties in my ear
As a sailor would in fear
But I am a pirate who enjoys his beer
I'm a pirate who can fuck and steer
The sex was good
But how good is good?
When yeses are shouldn'ts
And no's are shoulds
Her legs are long
And that's a plus
Cuz when I'm in her
She has to cuss
The sex was good
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64.34.180.106/songs.aspx?SongID=4116&ArtistID=9993
Techno poetry, take a listen
www.gangbox.com/mp3/thesexwasgood.mp3
Written July 11th, 2004
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"dirties in my ear"- i like that-
you are so good at this stuff-
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I like sex, and I like this poem to. The poem was good, but how good is good? I have no idea what the fuck I'm saying, I'm too high to think right. Good job.
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She whispers dirties in my ear
As a sailor would in fear
Something just doesn't seem to fit here. I think it's the "in" in the second line. Everything else is great about this though. -
brilliant song
much love 
Amritha
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How do u come up with this stuff ????????? Im just curious!!!
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nice i like oh n is dat you? your pretty hot for 30 lol
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nice i like oh n is dat you? your pretty hot for 30 lol
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No, don't .. I like it. Don't wipe your ass with it. It is catchy as hell, which is why I keep coming back -- I've been singing the damn thing to myself all afternoon. The problem is, that one line is the catchiest, and that is the worst line in the piece. I can't help but try to rewrite it, because I keep humming it to myself and it just feels like you could make it better.
I was thinking that maybe not so obvious a rhyme? "Her legs are long and python strong and she cusses when she comes". There is enough rhyme there in "long" and "strong" to keep the musical rhythm, but the sounds of "strong" and "come" are similar enough to not clash, but different enough to not be sing-songy -- and it captures the long, sexy legs .. and a little dirty word play.
I bet you could do better than my suggestion, though.
Ok, this is my last comment, I promise. -
Frankly, I wrote this about ten years ago, and the whole thing erks me, I wouldn't use it to wipe my ass, but that's just me, most songs under three minutes are like that.
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No, I agree, the "long legs" says something. It is a sexy image. But the the whole line seems forced. It would be good if you could work the long legs in, and reference to cussing, in a more subtle way, maybe. When you say "because", there is a cause and effect implication that just doesn't work her. I'd rather just hear the gritty details of the legs and cussing and not suggestions of why there is cussing -- if that makes any sense.
BTW, I like the way it sounds .. it is just that one line that bugs me. -
See, for a guy, long legs says many things, but it's a guy thing, an endless list if you will, but I will reiterate, this is a very old song and by no means something I would consider POETIC, because well, it's a techno song with blatant late 90's post grunge magical smoke blown up its ass.
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Hahaha .. why do I always miss all the controversy?
Well .. onto the song. I liked the sound of it; I like the ironic mixing of meaning of "no", "yes", "should", and "shouldn't". The "her legs are long, and that's a plus, cuz when I'm in her, she has to cuss" is lost on me, though -- even in the song. I don't see the implication: long legs to cussing, really, and that bother's me, some.
I know the cussing is part of the "whispering dirties", which works and has a raw sex feel. The "long legs" is something physical that we can paint the scene mentally with. Maybe, "Long legs wrapped around my butt; thrust so nice she has to cuss". .. no .. that doesn't do it, either. To clarify: I think that line feels forced, and it ruins the mood of the rest; which is good. -
The name is ironic, and while I may be young, I am not stupid. Barbie. Xx
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Yes, one of my responsibilities is to behave as a husband, although I'm not married? there is no t-shirt that explains that or bumper sticker, and once there is maybe it'll click in your head.
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Actually, you said you were a 'husband' which led me to believe that you were married, although clearly that is not the case. I am a little slow, please don't erm kill me or anything bad like that. I've already read the song and commented on it and possibly listened to it as well. It's an amusing song and re-worked could probably masquerade as a pop song and hit the top ten although I'm sure that you resent the suggestion, as all intelligent people would. Barbie. Xx
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Are you people SLOW?
I never said I was married I said
I have a girlfriend of seven years,
and two kids, that's not married, but it's close
and I am an actor and a carpenter
among other things. What in the fuck
does any of this have to do with my song?
Nothing, exactly, which leads me to believe
you're all fucking dingy. -
Ahahaha, how gullible I and some other people are never fails to amaze me. I actually thought you were married, an actor, a carpenter etcetera. Lol, well t'ra. Barbie. Xx
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Let's clarify shall we.
We are both talking about a song of mine
called the sex was good, right?
Have you heard the song?
I wrote it, and I can assure you
it's about FUCKING, sorry.
For a poet, you sure have a problem
with certain words, I don't. -
For your info, You said you were married and you said it to Barbie, I read it, Now I see you removed it. Whatever. And no Males are the ones who use the word FUCK not females and if they do, they care about nothing and nobody, They care about just getting fucked and that's it. And yes there is a lot wrong with the word FUCK. I said it was a nice song. Damn, you have to stop reading in between the lines. LATER
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a. I'm not married
b. I'm a musician
c. it's a song meant to be performed not judged
d. there is nothing wrong with the word fuck
e. I know TONS of chicks that love to be FUCKED. -
Very nice piece you have here, The only thing I did not care for was, the part you used " Fuck " You know most females out here and others, do not like it when men use that word.
And with you being married, you should not use that word, because, Know you don't fuck your wife. You make love to her. Other then that this song you have wrote was great... -
That's weird, it works fine for everyone else, are you giving it time to load?
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i clicked on the link and nothing happened.
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okay,i'm tryin it now
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click on the song, give it a whirl for the full effect
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you are a night blooming flower
this was good,interesting words and flow,i saw no miss spellings and the write flowed very well,keep up the decent work,nbf
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Pirate ship, huh.
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Well yo ho ho.. and a bottle of rum.. ya can be my pirate any time
heheheheheh oops 
Good tune hun
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Lol, get you and all your fancy occupations... I was merely wasting my time. Glad to see you're not - I salute you. Barbie. Xx
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i kno it's a song silly man, i saw the linnk in the authors comment.
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Like who, you? LOL
I am doing something useful with my time barbie.
I'm a teacher, a carpenter,
a poet, a father, a husband and artist, a singer
and composer, I play a range of instruments. I'm an
actor, active in my community on many different levels,
and the big brother of 8 kids, and I'm only 29. Next. -
If that actually is you, you're a bizarrely good looking guy who should be out doing something useful with his time. Barbie. Xx
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It's a song -- click on the linlk, I'm sure you'll pick up immediately on the sarcasm of my poopy lyrics and laugh along with me, come on you know I can rhyme better than this turd on turd love scrumpet.
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yes, if you want to hear the song, click on the link,
and if you want to buy the album go to cdbaby.com and
than search for horus8. -
Nice... so is this lyrics to a song?
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Oooohh.. damn you and liking tall girls...
sobs
no...k..joke.
good...though, you need more porn in it for me to REAAAAAAAAAAAALLY like it, as it stands, i just REALLLLY like it
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Yah ..I clicked on it
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Can't seem to get it to download
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did you click on the song link?
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Did you click on the song link?
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Whoops ..no, but I'm on my way
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Did you hear the song?
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Hmm, maybe I should be laughing? But I think I've had sex like this when yeses are shouldn'ts ...and the cussing is great ..so are the physical endearments that make those yeses replace the shouldn'ts ...but somehow when it's over ...hmm..anyway, it made me think ..and I liked the rhythm to it.
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great
hahahahahahaha.... lusty, and good!! and you must be talented if you can fuck and steer at the same time!! wooo, hooo!! great write!! -
lol good job, good job. very blunt, very real. lol. keep fucking and keep writing lol
~Frankee
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