My heart is aching for you
I cannot give you up my love
the pain without you is agony.
I am sorry for the pain I caused
I did not mean it.
Can we go back to how it was?
Our love is so serene, so deep
It comes but once in a lifetime
not to be thrown away, but cherished.
For cherish you I do, with my heart
It is yours to keep.
To be in your embrace is all I need
Nothing else compares with that
I feel you, enjoy you, love you back.
Without you is too much to bare.
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Written July 10th, 2004
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Thank you sweety, for reading one of my early poems, I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. I shall add you to my favourites as well.
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again another fantastic write by a very talented writer. the flow and ryhming is great. im adding you to my favorites.
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[delete ] [history] [reply] BabyMia (im) made a comment on Too much to bare (reply):
'Jennie your one of the greatest poets i know on AP. I was so in love with my boyfriend but we broke up only 3 weeks ago. So i can realate to this poem very very well. Iam going to book mark this.! Please do keep writing i will Keep reading your poems. Iam usally very pickie at my applauds but you Deseve 2~ Love Always a Fellow Poet ~!~Mia~!~ -
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'giving my second applauds! lol'.
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[delete ] [history] [reply] BabyMia (im) made a comment on Too much to bare (reply):
'Yes it hurts alot. And it hurts more when your so confused. I cry everytime i think about it.!!!! At least you where able to cal it quits and move on . You turly have a strong heart. But i have to go.. Stupied High school class.lol. ! ~!~Mia~!~ -
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[delete ] [history] [reply] BabyMia (im) made a comment on Too much to bare (reply):
'Yes it hurts alot. And it hurts more when your so confused. I cry everytime i think about it.!!!! At least you where able to cal it quits and move on . You turly have a strong heart. But i have to go.. Stupied High school class.lol. ! ~!~Mia~!~ -
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[delete ] [history] [reply] Am8ur (im) made a comment on Too much to bare (reply):
'yet another sweet write, there is nothing harder than the thought of living your life with out the one you love, the thought of them not being there with yu is incredibly hard to bare. this is a wonderful job! Til'
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I really enjoy reading your poems. You put your emotions through so well. Keep writing Jenn Love Mia
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Aww...... this is a very sweet poem. I can totally relate to it, not just my boyfriend, but my friends I couldn't live without 'em.. I'm a sucker for any and all things having to do with love... ^_^ You write about it so well!
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Dear Kim, I have changed it from bear to bear, then I get told it is wrong, it should be bare LOL so tell me my friend "what is the right word to use?" i have changed it so many times
would like your opinion-Jenni
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An intersting title and an interesting change of title.
On first viewing it ought to read
Too much to bear.
Or too much to carry
Open deeper reflection
It could be
Too much to bare
Implying too much to reveal.
Neither would be inapt and both have relevant meaning, although one has deeper implications.
On the other hand, the only way the last line of the actual verse makes sense is as 'bear'. 'Without you is too much to bear.' is not, technicaly, good grammar, but this is a poem. 'Without you' is too much to bear IS acceptable as a concept and play on words since the subject is now a concept of a state ie 'Without you'. It is a tribute to the human mind that such a contradiction can be assimilated, overcome and understood, thus making it a viable line. Although it does make it somewhat song-life in quality. It wouldn't work anywhere else but a poem or song! lol
The poem implies (to me at least) that the (presumably female) woman is the wronged party and is begging for a return to what was. This is typical of the naivete and hope that surrounds the emotion we call Love. Nothing is ever the same, is it?
Still, it does lend this piece an aura of authenticity.
Love is not really an interest of mine (in words anyway! lol) but this was an enjoyable piece. Not a masterpiece, but does it have to be? It is difficult to shine in a field that most would say is cliched and done to death. This is a creditable effort.! Well done -
My heart is aching for you
I cannot give you up my love
the pain without you is agony.
I am sorry for the pain I caused
I did not mean it.
nice poem u gat her u must like this man abdly -
Thank you vic for your wonderful comment, I do rhyming sometime but mostly freeflow as I write from the heart, will be by to read some of yours dear friend-Jenni
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wow jennifer... this is a nice poem... jus was wandering here and there on AP.. and cliced your name.... to be more fortunate i read this poem... this poem is full of feelings... and thats what makes me type this comment even though it was rhymeles.. i think i soon gonna read some more works of yours...
.. take cares and have a nice time.... just keep it up dear friend... your humble little friend... ... 
.... - vic
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I really can relate to this....
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Thank you Jarvis for your kind comment, yes, it is true, I would like to have that special person back in my life.jenni
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this is a great wright. it shows want you have to be back with that spicel peoson in you life. keep you the great work. b-bye
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Thank you tonya, you were right it was mispelt, it's fixed now.
jenni
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I think bear should be spelt bare... I might be wrong.. but other than that... it was great!! It's hard losing someone who means so much to you. This was full of emotion. Good job! God bless.
~tonya~
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