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A wish

One day, one night
when the sun dances,
one day, one night
when the Luna sings.

One day, one night
when the world collide,
one day, one night
nor,love nor hate divide.

One day, one night
when our hearts will meet
and into eternity
one another will greet.

Author notes

It sounds a little like a chant with all the repetitions, although it wasn't meant to be one, it just came out of nowhere.
Written July 9th, 2004

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  • silverscent gold member
    July 9, 2004
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    That was a very touching poem. Your words were beautiful. I liked the way you repeated
    "One day, one night"
    It flowed very well. well done.