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Well, this is it
I'm on my own in a big wild world
still pulled back by my parents' strings
but today I'll face the world on my own for a change
This'll be my sneak pre-view of the world
of when I'm on my own and free from home
thoughts of where and how I'll be from here
and how I've been before
travel through my mind in wanderings as I stumble out the door
I grab my breakfast, purse, jacket and oh, the car keys
and don't forget to tell mom 'I love you' please..
I'm stumbling out the door already half-an-hour late
I'll say goodbye to the parents that were always with me
when I at last ventured out on the roadways in a real motor-vehicle
Down the driveway, slowly, carefully, gently
because my dad is standing at the garage door watching me
as I drive away in his car, by myself, for the very first time
once out of his sight I hear something rattling in the trunk
for fear that someone or something is along with me on my drive
I pulled over and checked, and secured my dad's tools that he had left
Onto the road, other drivers, and me
in a car, by myself, alone but confident
I realized that this was my glimpse of what it will be like
when I'll finally be pulled away from the stings of my parents
and I'll start a new trek in this life.
I found myself in new freedom on the roadways without supervision
fiddling with the radio, the air conditioning, etc.
I turned the music up, because no one told me not to
but I realized i was speeding a little and told myself no.
When no one's there to keep you in line, you better do it for yourself
or you'll get caught up in big trouble,
probably with the one who, as above, keeps you in line most of the time.
I understood why it's much easier when there's someone looking out for you
and telling you which way is best,
and I don't think I liked the freedom away from that fact,
freedom can be overrated when it's not carefully watched.
Well I got to my destination, safe and sound at that
and as surprised as my friends were, I drove there, in a car
I felt kind-of special, but remembered the uncomfortable cost,
'cause I for once was alone and made choices by myself
not knowing if I'd make the right one,
but I definitely had to try.
Author notes
(well, as you probably can tell, i just recieved my driver's license.. and this is about my first drive by myself.=)
Written July 8th, 2004
A contest entry
- Changes Anyone?? by SereneSoliloquy.
500 points, ended July 13, 2004, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i love the way youve jsut written what you thought and how you felt - its almost like a diary entry, but with flow and reads like poetry! Congrats on your driving test
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Lovely!!! i love this poem greatly. It flowed well, it had a cool rhythm and i think you're a poet by blood.
Great Piece keep writing
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Hehe, i remember this stuff. Oh wait, i'm still going through this stuff. Yeesh lol. Well this was awesome. Freedom's freaky. But good. But freaky. You really showed that paradox, ashimanator!!!!! Wonderfly poem
That's my new word... it's all... wondafly lol. God bless -Saab 
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what is this drivers lisence you speak of??? lol this is really nifty! yesss to know what freedom is... well that is a special gift and you captured it well in this poem! great write and good luck!
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Excellent!
That was awesome, Ash! Wow, I never really thought about that part of driving. All I've been focusing on is being able to get places, without my mom having to tag along. Wow, excellently written, and -as others have said- I liked the line about freedom being overrated. Quite an original write! Very good. Love you tons, girl.
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Freedom... I wish I knew what that felt like. But sadly I have no drivers lisence to speak of. Mmm I guess college will be my freedom in a month. This was wonderfully written. It had a very insitful (spelled terribly wrong I know) feel to it. Thanks for entering. Good luck in the contest.
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i liked it ... freedom is overrated u think its going to be great but its only scary and dissapointing... im hiding from freedom and responsibility... great write good job i'll even appluad and give u some points because i liked how u portrayed freedom and u promoted this and used some of ur points so u get some back and i really liked it good work
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Hey,
Wickedly written! I wish I could drive.. all my friends have at least their G1.. but I don't turn 16 until November
Very well written though, you captured what I imagine to be the freedom of being on the road by yourself for the first time.. good luck in the contest =)
Becca
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