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Enough

And its happened
They’ve won
Sticks and stones or both
Your words assault and sting
And I’ve given up the fight
To you bastards that own the swing and the slide
And the park and the rope around the bark,
Let me hang myself first though
Do you mind?
Yeah?

The broken crew
The broken scream
Fuck you and fuck me
And fuck everything
Every damned dream!!
They’re all lies!



What the fuck do



                    you think your doing?



Don’t you talk to me like you know me!
Don’t you tell me things I already know!
Don’t you fucking speak to me like I’m ignorant!
Don’t you dare tell –me- to go!
You are in my house bitch
You leave -- You scat
Before I attack what you hold dear and
Force you to shed tears
the way I’ve shed blood over the years

Yes I’m serious!
Dead Serious.
What?
Do you think I enjoy the pain you bring me?
I deserve the hate that boils within?
That I enjoy the thought of wringing innocent necks
That I enjoy the thought of falling to sin!

... I hate myself.
And you should to.

I dont want you to tell me I'm cute
And dont you tell me I’m perfect
Dont Hit On Me, like Im some fuckin’
Brittany Spears, or look somewhat like it
Go appeal to someone who has appeal
And hide me away while I peel
away the skin so that no one can see the
black girl's skin.
I hate black people skin!
You hate it to!
Dont deny it!


GODDAMN IT!
I HATE CHARITY!
STOP BADGERING ME!
I CANT STAND IT!
JUST GO AWAY!


How dare you tell me lies that are lost in the circuit of,
Dissatisfaction and loyalty
Don’t be –loyal- to me
How dare you be loyal to me!
I-AM-NOT-YOUR-FRIEND!

Don’t you see what I am trying to do for you?
I’m trying to be honest
I HATE BEING ME!



Why don’t I feel better…?
                   Do you feel better…?

Well….


     This sucks…



Life is hard enough without your friends on your back
Screaming that you’re on crack, YOU'RE AN ASS
You’re a stupid peace of white trash
THANKS
I APPRECIATE IT, PRICK
You pompous asshole
You whore
You bastard
You… you great friend.
..I hate you..
Yeah,
..I hate you..
.............................................
I cant take it...
I wont...

Shattered skull
Rented brain
Entrapped insanity
What’s my name again?
Ah yes,


Stupid


If you can't understand this poem
Read this and read it well

I love shooting these words at you
Watching you bleed with awe or shock
Watching you drown in your own guilt as it fills your lungs and stops your breathing,
So let it be known, clearly that yes, I truly do
Hate you
And everything you stand for
And I hope I never get another compliment from you again

I’m tired of your lies.


Author notes

if you've read this and understand. I applaud you. If you didnt. I still applaud you. I dont know what you think of this.. and i cant help you decide. Im sorry my writes are so long now and days.. but it seems like i have a lot to say.
Trish
Written July 8th, 2004

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  • Trellis
    September 2, 2004
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    Bravo!

    You were able to express your feelings quite well! A lot of people can't do that! Great job!

  • LostParamour
    August 28, 2004
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    Thanks for entering my contest... Good luck!!! I'll make meaningful comments when I judge the poems... I'm just thanking everybody for entering right now...


  • lifes torment
    August 1, 2004
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    Why be sorry? I understand the fake kindness part. It's not fair when people who supposedly care about you tell you such lies that may make you feel *ok* one second, and completely horrible the next. I don't know..That's just my view on it. Anyway, kick-ass write! I LOVE the raw anger. It's amazing what different emotions brings to poetry. =)
    -kayla=/


  • Lady Patricia
    July 27, 2004
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    oh and just to let you know... you're the only one who got the full meaning.
    You go girl


  • Lady Patricia
    July 27, 2004
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    awe jeeze... *rubs face* I do beleive that is the best critique I've had in some while... shame on you.. making me blush. I mean... well yeah.. *covers features and presses enter*
    thanks again


  • kay a
    July 27, 2004
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    wow...i really, really love this poem and i will tell why...EVERYBODY feels this way, ALL the time...sometimes, u are with somebody that makes u feel worse than u already feel, trying to fill with u with lies of their fake kindness...or u just dont know what to do with yourself because u feel like shit and u feel like u are shit and no matter what anyone says...it just WONT change...GREAT POEM! i really love the subtle rhyming here and there and the emotions, the anger, the anguish...beautiful, beautiful piece of art
    you are making this contest VERY interesting
    thanks for entering again and good luck
    kay


  • Naughtygrlred
    July 21, 2004
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    wow, this was exactly how i feel some days, with a certain person, your words are speaking to me, great piece here

  • Lady Patricia
    July 21, 2004
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    oh jesu!@ Im glad yo uliked my write, thank you...
    Im all emerbassed now.


  • vampira1665 silver member
    July 13, 2004
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    Holy Shit!!!! I am speechless. You made my favs with this piece. Wow!!

    Hugs and bites, Lady Raven


  • Lady Patricia
    July 8, 2004
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    No, no, no, no! I dont mind being hit on, not at all. But dont do it as a game. I watched some guys say, "oh look at that chick right there. if you get that chicks numbver thats an extra fifty bucks." this shit isnt a game and we women are a whole lot smarter than such like that. And i have friends who just live on sexual innuendos and come on's and although they dont mean it, its constant. I have girls grab my breast and tease me and say oh your lucky i have a boyfriend or something.
    anyhow,
    you're a sweetheart and I think Im going to put you on favorites, yer fun.
    Thank you for replying soo much on my poem . and the applaud.
    Trish


  • Genevieve
    July 8, 2004
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    If you ever need me I'm here. It happens to people. People going up to people and hitting on them. If you don't want it tell them to fuck off. If you want it but don't want them doing it to you. Tell them to fuck off. What ever makes you happy. I have people on my case all the time and it is annoying. Just annoythem back. It's hard to undersand your feeling in this kind of way though. I've been through alot of shit. I'm only 13. I've had guys come up to me. I tell them to fuck off (lie) and say i have a boyfriend that can kick their sorry little asses if they don't get away from me, and it worked most of the time. But some times you just have to ignore them. if you can't find someone you can talk to. Like those hotline things. they help. i know your probably thinking that I just don't want to listen but that's because you are older than me and i haven't ben through the same stuff you have. if you need me... I'm here. Love ~Heart

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