Crescent of a moon craving fullness;
A stream flowing gently,
starving little fishes
looking for little deeds of goodness;
A hungry shark ,
relentless to create a red sea;
The wrath of a volcano
lying dormant;
A mourning peacock
looking up at the skies
desperate to perform the antics
in the downpour;
An autumn tree
whose branches have bared;
A heap of wet clay
lying untouched
in the potters wheel;
An artist whose creations
have exhausted;
I can feel the absence everywhere;
I can feel the absence inside me…
Author notes
Second option
Written July 6th, 2004
A contest entry
- contest #4 by Apocalyptic Scarves.
300 points, ended July 27, 2004, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Aaaaaw… it’s such a beautiful poem…. And I can relate to this one… nothing seems good when someone you love is absent … it’s so heartfelt… and loved the creativity of every line it’s touched my heart… it’s so melancholic…
mina
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She shows the value of creator.
Absence by Apurva is reflecting the present condition of this world which is melting day by day so, its title is appropriate to the poem. But, anyway, its a poem of optimestic showing goodness to the readers. -
nice very lonely piece, if there were a way to describe emptines and loneliness, this would be it.
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Short and picturesque...some good imagery happening here and the reader doesn,t walked away feeling bored.
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I liked this poem...it has a melancholic tone to it almost beautiful one you could say about you talking about all these nature's events and so on as having similarities to your soul that something is missing from making it all complete,nice job.
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Great imagery and beautiful poem. I liked it, well done
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Superb Imagery.Nice blend of nature and mind, a crafty piece, Keep it up.
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