Your arms are my shelter
when the world gets to cold
Your voice warms my body
and soothes my lost soul
Your touch is my Eden,
your kiss makes me weak
Your eyes are the window
to all the dreams that I seek
I have always believed in someone like you,
Someone who makes the sky seem a little more blue
Who makes the sun a bit warmer, and the stars shine much brighter,
and makes the weight of the world seem a little bit lighter
I feel an energy so strong from your body to mine,
I feel its here I belong
and it’s with you when I SHINE……..
Author notes
"It must be love"
Written July 6th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- One for the lovers and Hopeless romantics by Amy Sharpe.
300 points, ended September 3, 2005, 23 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I feel an energy so strong
from your body to mine,
I feel its here I belong
and it’s with you when I SHINE……
How i do understand this feeling - we are lucky to have felt /feel it -
This write is beautiful! Love poems are my favorite to read, but this one meant more because I can totally relate to it. You did a great job describing how it feels to be in love. I enjoyed the read.
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This is so very beautiful and so heart warming and touching. The love for this person exudes throughout and your expression of this love was glorious. I really enjoyed this and I think we are all winners if we write about love.
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wow, that is a beautiful piece of work. very well done. i dont like ryhming but you pull it off very well. great job!! ^.^
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It's fine! I have this terrible urge of playing with poems I enjoy reading - it's a bad habit! The poem is very good - and thank you so much for sharing.
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Hi - Thanks for the suggestion.I switched it up a bit - not exactly as you mentioned - but used it as an outline. Let me know what you think!
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heck ya it must be love. this is so sweet and absolutly beautiful. wow this is one of yours I must have missed but im glad I got a chance to read it. your rhyme was awsome.
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I like this poem because it simply flows and this is how I have imagined love should be simply flowing and returning amongst two hearts.
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It must be lovely to find a soul mate, someone whose love is spiritual as well as physical. May I just make a suggestion about these lines:
"I have always believed in someone out there like you--
Someone who just makes the sky seem a little more blue"
Do you think they may sound better:-
"I have always believed in someone like you--
who just makes the sky seem a little more blue"
Just a mere suggestion. - Good luck in the contest.
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I really did like this, my only critism would be that the stanza with three lines should be two like the rest, but, I am not the poet, and maybe you had a reason for that, but this is really good, and I really do like your sense of imagery. You ave a great talent, keep it up.
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This is wonderful!!!The flow is amazing and everything you said was breath taking...I espicially liked
Your touch is my Eden, your kiss makes me weak
Your eyes are the window to all the dreams that I seek
those words really got to me...keep up the good work! -
This is a beautiful piece of work, and it flows so smoothly. I love how the words, so simple and yet they make such an impact with the way the whole thing just flows from one line to the next. I can tell you put your whole heart into this. Also, the background is just gorgeous and I think it adds something to the whole thing. Beautiful work, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest, I hope you at least get a ranking up there. I'm so glad I was able to read this.
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omg! i love every single line in this poem!!! and i love the backround! you're so talented! i know exactly how you feel its just i couldnt find the words to explain it! im so glad i got to read this! youve inspired me so much! Good luck in the contest! ~Brittany~
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that was wonderful..it made me think about alot of things thats going on in my life..never really had a poem to make me think like that..keep up the good work..
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This poem was awesome! It flowed so beautifully and the reader can really feel the emotion that you feel. Keep up the great work, and good luck in the contest!
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Great
I love this poem. It is so wonderful and love is flowing throughout the entire piece. I think that this is a grand piece of work and that you are a very creative author this piece. Great job and keep up the fantastic work. I have no problem applauding this piece of work, good job. -
This is a tender write. I appreciate the fact when people are in love and they 'gush' with the emotion, like a volcano erupting.
My favorite part of this was------It's with you that I shine.
*Wow....keep on writing and sharing your feelings of love with us.
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Wonderful expression and emotions! I enjoyed this, very light and airy...
Great job and great write!
~Lynnette
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this poem describes eloquently and excellently what it is like to be in love: ...the weight of the world a little lighter. it was a very true poem as well as nicely rhyming. very, very good job.
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Ahhh!! Thank you so much!! I was actually editing it while you read it though!!
Oh well - glad you liked! Check back in a bit - though I wanna add a nice pic and background - format is changed as well.I am also changing the format of my other poem - Broken Heart - I like it better as you suggested..
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This is an excelent piece! It flowed beautifuly and the rhyme scheme works really well. It shows alot of strong emotion. thank you for sharing sand good luck in the contest
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This is the one that I have been reading that is getting me through this difficult and uncertain period. If you have time, please read it again. You have always written from your heart. It is time to listen to it again, through your incredible writing talent.
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Lady is right...you don't need me to shine. You just needed someone who cares about you enough to show you how to shine again. This is a beautiful poem, Jazz. I just feel like I am really getting under your skin lately for some reason, and it scares me. I am sorry if I care a bit too much. I won't be so persistant anymore. I promise. I just have to learn NOT to care as much, I guess.
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Jazz, sweetie, I've got a feelin' you shine whether your Prince is around, or not, but I'm sure even more so, when he's near!! This is another truly lovely write! Girl, what I'd give to know how you do this on such a consistent basis! Much of it, of course, is the gift you were born with, but I'm sure the love that you've found has much to do with it, also! Simply beautiful, sweetie! Truly lovely!
Paula
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