I'm not so sure you love me
And I'm not so sure you care
You've hurt me too much
This pain I can not beare
I feel I can not trust you
'Cause you keep doing this to me
All I did was love you
So why do you keep hurting me?
Why do you make me cry
Such painful tears as these?
I treat you with respect
So why do you do this to me?
I am so forgiving
I could never stay mad at you
No matter what you do
I will always love you.
Author notes
I read "Twisted Sunset" by NurseHayley
My favorite lines were:
Flecked shadows absorb
Remaining vitality
A silent death
Vividly set
I read "Sorrow" by hobbitscanfly
My favorite lines were:
I'll lay my head on this wooden box
No more air to breathe
Asphyxiate
My heart will turn and seethe
Written July 5th, 2004
A contest entry
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300 points, ended July 8, 2004, 3 entries
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Well it is a great thing to be loyal and to remain in love, but it's yet another thing to remain steadfast when someone hurts you, or ceases to care. Hopefully you know the difference. I wish you well.
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This is such a lovely poem
The sadness just creeps through. I loved reading it. Just keeping an eye on spelling ang\d you are good. there is nothing so sad as unrequited love.
Love poem
Love
Effie
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You did a good job with this and it is a universal theme that so many people understand. So much to give, but someone not willing to accept that love being offered.
I remember having the same feelings.
Technically speaking...This pain I can not beare
you want to get rid of the "e" on beare
and I agree with johns statement of can not.
thanks for entering our contest.
Cheryl
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It’s a sad thing to read something like this. To know that there are people out there with so much to give, and they choose to give it to people that seem not worthy of it. It never ceases to amaze me. You did a nice job with your rhyme scheme on this, though I would recommend, “cannot” rather than “can not” in two of your lines.
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