They're playing our song
Let's dance it again
Although it's been long
Let's bring back the then
Let's dance it again
Smoothly glide around the floor
Let's bring back the then
Our spirits did soar
Smoothly glide around the floor
To this beautiful tune
Our spirits did soar
We even did croon
To this beautiful tune
Although it's been long
We even did croon
They're playing our song.
Author notes
Written July 4th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- A Ryhmers Paradise!! by tupac.
300 points, ended July 14, 2005, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Form Contest: Pantoum - Romance - Personification by Little Eagle.
600 points, ended June 26, 2008, 10 entries
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Comments
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Thank you for your entry
This is definitely romance in this, classic really with the nostalgia over 'our song' theme. The way this reads its almost like a dance waltzing around and around.
You did a good job of following the guidelines of the form, there is a lot of forced rhyme in this though and the flow suffers for it.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
i love this repetetive style and have actually wrote a few like this myself. I would really have liked to see something in your author's box telling us if this was either someone you've lost or someone you've just lost the magic with. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck
Steve
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Nice Poem it's pretty good
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wow i loved this. i still remmeber my song with her. this poem is awesome. keep it up thanx for sharing. EaRiNe!!!!
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