In the Beginning
from the First to the Last
in whatever form
I am found ~ in that I AM
bound with You forevermore
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[contemporary tanka]
As Above, so Below
The All is One
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And when we fell together all our flesh was like a veil
that I had to draw aside to see
the serpent eat its tail.
From Last Year's Man by Leonard Cohen
www.leonardcoh
Written July 4th, 2004
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Awww, this was so beautiful!! It's almost like wedding vows that have been said. Another poem with great affirmation in it
Very well done 
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these words touch the very essence.
the search comes to an end,
for THAT which I was looking for
I now know that I AM.
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Yes, that's right
"In the Beginning
from the First to the Last
in whatever form"
You would appreciate my poem, THE IMPORTANCE OF FORMS
--Ellis
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Oooo forevermore is such a delicate way to finish this poem. The picture does really begin the poem well.
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I like this poem and also agree with it greatly... I think it shows some wisdom, too... excellent job, Maatkara, DK
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Outstanding!
This is something really interesting, something that I will think about for a long time to come. I looked up the meaning of "Ouroboros" and was mystified by the information that met my eyes about the snake devouring its own tail to sustain its life in an eternal cycle of renewal. I also read about the double Ouroboros, i.e, of two snakes swallowing one another which signifies volatility. Spiritually, it signifies the balance of the upper and the lower natures. This is precious information. I made a note of it in my tanka book alongwith your excellent tanka. Thank you so much for sharing this wonderfully tanka and the Ouroboros on AP. The way the picture and tanka has been centered, it made me feel as though God has stopped, paused and rested for a while to reveal His being with me forevermore here. This tanka is profound and is packed with alot in five lines. There is a lot of richness and depth in your words. After having read about the Ouroboros, I can only say that you have really done justice to it by the writing of this tanka. The tanka flows beautifully and is well blended by L3, the Kaori or pivot line. Each part, the upper part {Kaminshu} and the lower part {Shimonoku} of the tanka read very well on their own as a haiku. The pivot line balances the tanka very well. Definitely, this passes on an emotion to the reader too..."The All Is One...As Above So Below". This is just so excellent work! I am so happy to meet you, Gennelle {{{{Hugs}}}}!
-Charishma
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Thank you!
It is good to be appreciated; even better to be understood. 
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Very true!
Lovely how you succeeded in putting this Hermentic widom in the elegant tanka form.
I love: "in whatever form"
Cheers!
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Thank you, Sharron! I didn't think they'd ever definitely established what kind of flower the "rose of Sharon" actually was - but that sounds good to me.
Do you remember the line from Leonard's song, "Last Year's Man": "I had to stand aside to see the serpent eat its tail"?
(refering to the ouroboros).
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Eternal sunshine is in the rain
Only within constant change
Is the union with the universe
In heavenly light verse
Linking you for all time with the unchanging law
Your soul is found
In being one homeward bound
I see that earth is enveloped in night
While your words are denoting heaven in the blush of blue light
Song 2:1 I am a rose of Sharon, a lily of the valleys.
One of the true colours of the rose of Sharon is the same colour as our translucent blue water planet from outer space.
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Yes, it sure does That's the beauty of the tanka, (the origin of, and pre-existing haiku by hundreds of years), more flexible in expression and subject matter. But maybe you haven't read enough good haiku
. Thank you.
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Does "I am the Alpha and the Omega" apply as well? That's one of my favorite things to say, being the loveable ball of weird that I am. I admit...I tend to avoid Haikus like I do hugs from cheek pinching relatives (ICK), but this really doesn't read like a Haiku, it seems to have more substance and less triviality/mooning on about nature. I was tempted to read because of the title, the Ouroboros is one of my favorite tales. Well done here. Much enjoyed.
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Thank you!
Yes Mari, energy cannot be destroyed (physical or spiritual).
~ G
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Forever bound, never will entirely disappear. Atoms changing into a new form...that is how I see life.
Wonderful poem, which isn't a surprise!
Mari
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loved it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Omg what a beautifier of the tanka form !!!
"I am found - in that I AM
bound with You forevermore"
As I am to you ~ mother earth ..
Also to you my friend "the poet"
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Thank you!
The title of this photograph is "Blue Marble"...
~ G
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all things are indeed bound together ... but none so much as two lovers. I loved the picture, reminded me of Carl Sagan's Pale Blue Dot.
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yes.. I used to want that phrase tatooed to my back - "as above, so below." This is a very meaningful piece with an important message .. one which I wish everyone could grasp.
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Wonderful and precise tanka. As always your poetry comes from deep within - the deep voice of the soul, spirit and the intellect. Profound wisdom....forevermore! Great work, Genelle - as I've come to expect from you.
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The alpha and omega--opposite ends of the spectrum, yet connected. Very nicely done, even without the snake as a graphic!
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Thank you Bill. I think you got the gist pretty well.
(One only has to type 'Ouroboros' into Google to find out more)
~ G
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Mystic
Hi Gennelle:
What a lovely Tanka. Very profound, as most of your writes are, with that mystic flavor to spice up the text and make us all wonder if we truly understand what you have told us. I enjoy your puzzles as they are beautiful poetry, even if not completely understood. I too hope that I am bound with I AM forever as well. Bill -
Thank you, M! Yes,I used the tanka form, but didn't want to make that the focus. Only cryptic if unfamiliar with arcane and archetypal symbolism. Meant to be a little esoteric
~ G
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Profound
Is this a tanka? 5-7-5-7-7.
This is the ultimate reality. It seems the more words we use, the fuzzier it becomes. The fewer, the more cryptic.
The graphic is outstanding, the blue island in the velvety blackness of space.
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