The breath of deity,
Eternal and immortal,
Divinity's very spark,
Igniting life and creativity.
The imaginative energy,
Inventive and ingenious,
Composing musical symphonies,
Moving itself in perfect synergy.
The suffering servant,
Patient and strong,
Carrying our heavy burdens,
Lighting the load of the journey to death.
The heart of emotion,
Beating and pulsating,
Enhancing experiences,
Taking to new heights and new depths.
The possessor of life,
Unyielding and unrelenting,
Rising up and beyond,
Surpassing all physical limitations.
The howling wind,
Heard and not seen,
Moving us through our path,
Echoing its call to inhale, to breathe.
Author notes
This poem purposely does not name what it is defining but it should be obvious from within itself and certainly from the contest in which it is entered. Also, there are purposely no sentences in this. The periods merely end the thought and the stanza.
This was one of the more challenging writes and I am grateful (win or not) for the contest that challenged it.
Written July 3rd, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- What is a Soul? Philosophy Contest #2 by CrimsonUniverse.
300 points, ended July 10, 2004, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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this not only garnishes a thorough meaning of the soul,it displays the creation of life the way God presented it to us.the soul is carried around by a vessel called a body,but that soul is the breathe of Jehovah.this is special.
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This is excellent writing, truly the work of a great poet. It has not only a mesmerizing quality about it but very moving, stirring even the soul deep within. And, who needs a name, for God has many. His power alone speaks His name, just as this beautiful piece does so well.
If this did not garner the gold in the contest, it should have; especially considering that it more than met for what the host was looking.
Love and hugs, BonnieQ
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the spirit moves without pause through our life, guiding us, and getting us in an enlightened state to the final period of our sentence served on earth....Artis
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I love this poem. everytime i read over it i am struck by a detail i havent noticed before. the depth in it is amazing. there arent words to describe it!
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Its a beautiful poem
I thought it was certainly worthy of an entry
But your such a sweetheart I saw your comment on whether you didnt win or not
Not many have that touch of grace
You go hun I love it
Now its me bedtime 2am lol
Hope all is well with you
Love n hugs
Susan~~~
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Good job.
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This is a difficult sibject and I am mesmerized. This was true talent exposed in simple wording that I for once understood in depth, thank you for enlightening me with it!!! I enjoyed even the periods in there!!! You did very good on this and cannot emphasize it enough, BRAVO!!!
I love this:
The heart of emotion,
Beating and pulsating,
Enhancing experiences,
Taking to new heights and new depths.
Simply brilliant and whole and poetic, an experience I am bookmarking!!!
Take care,
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ahh great job- this was a good write. it was very deep, and filled with emotion! - very nicely written, and it had a good flow to it as well- thanx for sharing
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This was very well written, the wording was really wonderful, and it carried a very strong and thought provoking meaning as well, something that actually made me read it bit by bit to absorb every individual thought, I wanted to be sure I got all of it in, and when I did, this left me very satisfied. A very strong, in depth write.
The write of mine you critiqued, "Cycle", was actually a portrayal, in my mind at least, of two different elements put into human hosts, what they are capable of seperated, and the strength's they acheive through unity. It was basically just my way of looking at how different people can act when they are divided or thrown together. Thank you for your critique of it.
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I think you have described a soul very well. This is definetely a poem to be proud of. Good luck in the contest. Queen
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very nice write keep it up i liked it. thanx for sharing. EaRiNe!!!!
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Beautiful and thought provoking. This is one of my favorite poems of all time. Such depth and emotion that it brought tears to my eyes, though not because it was sad. You should be extremely proud of yourself...because this is a masterpiece. The talent you possess is exceptional and I am in awe.... Neither religious or bias, I think everyone should read this truly stunning piece of work. Such an understatement to say 'good job.' You have an incredible talent my friend and you will go far with it...
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excellent thought, very beautiful and a excellent choise of words, excellent, great flow, totally loved every part about it...
~KM SIGLIN -
truly great
Wow I can't even put into words. This is a great in depth poem of something very complicated for some to write about but yet you seemed to do it with such ease. -
You are correct. I meant divinity's for it is the very spark OF divinity. Thanks.
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You don't have to mention the word 'soul' in your poem, this is
fine as it is Btw I think you mean divinity's and not
divinities, which is the plural of divinity.
Jen
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This was just beautiful... I loved it and it was just what I needed to hear tonight... Thank you very much.
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It was difficult for me to get the theme, I like the way your words flowed though.
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melphleg~
Hey! I thought that this was a really good poem. It was nicely written and it had a good flow to it as well. You have talent. Keep writing and thank you for sharing this with all of us here!
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This is very pretty, and has an excellent thought and flow in it. You chose your words carefully and well. Good job! My kudos to you and good luck!
-dragonsteel
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