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the day i realised

The day i cried
Was the day i realised



Sitting together
Relaxed and comfortable

You told me you loved me
My words spoke the same

It was late at night
I was wearing my nightdress

We laid and cuddled
No more was said

The next week we were lying
My mother disapproved

Of how close we were getting
So closer we moved

It changed that night
We were all on our own

I got drawn in and captured
But i didn't moan

I didn't realise it then
but deep down i was crying

A dirty old bed
In which i was lying

I didn't think to stop you
I didn't know i should

I'm now in a cage
And i wish i would

Break those bars
but it isn't that simple

When you don't know whats happening
You don't know it's cruel

When everyone was around
He dared to make a move

With that softening voice
He used to sooth

His hand slipped further
I went all numb

Now i see what he was doing
I feel so dumb

When he used that voice
I let him do as he pleased

i didn't know wether it was want or fear
My mind just seized

I could spend ages telling you
It was my entire fault

The day i cryed
Is the day i realised

Author notes

i couldn't find words to describe this. it was one of the most difficult things ive had to do. i still havent broke those bars
Written July 3rd, 2004

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  • xxfallenxx
    July 8, 2004
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    Wow, I feel the emotion of that one. Especially since it's something I've been through. I know how hard it is, so just hang in there.


  • Mozaic
    July 8, 2004
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    it's very hard to write about a situation that hits too close to home...but it also takes a brave & strong person to release trapped feelings like this in such a positive manner!

  • EagleMaiden
    July 8, 2004
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    ohh wow...not much that I can say on this one ..just a simple "good luck" to you..the work itself is wonderful..its easy to see that you have a lot of feeling...one quick question..does he read your work?? if not, maybe he should..just something to think about..lots of times we assume people know how we feel when in reality, they are so caught up in their own worlds that they dont or cant..either way..perhaps this really needs to be brought to light..good luck hon


  • queen Moderators member
    July 5, 2004
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    Just remember HE knew exactly what he was doing, even if you didn't. He took advantage of the situation. Don't blame yourself for this. This is a heart wrenching poem. Very well written. Queen


  • Molassis
    July 4, 2004
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    WHile very well written... this is so very sad.... YOU did nothing wrong Tazmin, YOU were taken advantage of. I really hope that you can find the strength to find a way to stop this... to get out of it. I am so sorry I had to leave last night... I did come back online as soon as I got home. Please don't be mad at me!

    You did a lovely job writing this... I'm impressed! God bless you dear Tazmin. ~Melissa

  • kittyom
    July 4, 2004
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    dude........WHAAAAAAAAAT???????? hey, i'm from Arkansas and we really don't play THAT game?........DAAAAAAMN!!!!!!!!.....just kidding.......i really am from Arkansas, and HAD to throw that in there........well.....ummmmmmmm.........best wishes to you guys.........keep it real....... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Stephanie~~~~~~~~~~ i really do apologize for coming across so harsh....sometimes i use sarcasm in situations that i feel uncomfortable or am not sure what to say........

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