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Becoming ~ inspired by Raven Aurora


It begins with a smile

across a dark room.

A glorious passion

then starts to bloom.


Our attraction is one

that can’t be denied.

We unite with vast lust

strive to be satisfied.


Our first kiss is exciting

I get lost in your eyes;

bliss shoots from swelled breasts

to moist quivering thighs.


Fervent hands rip our cloths

till I’m bared to your touch.

Urgent fires engulf me

I’m rapt in your clutch.


Your fingers so supple

bring me close to the peak,

lips follow their path

I’m unable to speak.


Pleasure, like flames

licks down my spine.

The heat of our hunger

is something divine.


The plunge of your sword.

The grasp of my sheath.

An inferno consumes us;

with the tug of your teeth


Lighting strikes deeply

fusing all that we are;

your seed is a comet

a rapturous star.


My body is open.

My soul is exposed.

As each thrust fulfills me,

this truth is disclosed.


With the wondrous setting

of passion’s first sun;

we melt and we mingle

and two become one.

Author notes

If you like my poem please read the one that inspired it.  

Becoming ~  inspired by Raven Aurora
allpoetry.com/poem/303736

As requested in the rules:  I serve the queen of Nubia; may she live long and write much.  

  ~ Patti ~
Written July 2nd, 2004

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  • Willow
    July 4, 2004
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    This was erotic without being blunt. Like watch lovers through a sheer curtain. Just a soft, blurred scene. Wonderful. Good luck in the contest, my dear. I too love Raven's work.

    ~ Willow ~


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    July 4, 2004
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    Sensual, beautiful, and passionate
    Love this
    Wish we PM had that kind of font
    I like it also
    Good luck in the contest
    I love this one
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • AngelSeeker silver member
    July 3, 2004
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    Thank you... I'm flattered to get such praise from a writer I admire. I would love to read your romance novel.

    ~Patti~


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    July 3, 2004
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    This is such a beautiful take on that poem. I think I like your version better than my own! lol, I don't always think very much of my abilities, but if anything I write can inspire others, then my job as a poet is finished. I love your intertwining of passion and ecstatic rapture... it's something that I aim for in every erotic piece that I write. The last stanza of your entry brings back a storyline I once had--when I get my computer back on the internet and if you are interested, I'll send you my first romance novel. This is so wonderful and a stroke of sheer genius. I will definitely have to read more of your work, whether inspired by me or not.

    Wishing you all the best of luck in the contest...

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • agazeley gold member
    July 3, 2004
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    I'm not usually into this sort of poetry - but you have written it so beautifully that it is beyond reproach - I am Raven Aurora’s number one fan and only came here because I say her name – I’m glad I did - Albert.


  • Meridian
    July 3, 2004
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    Well written.

    This is an interesting piece, very descriptive and it flows beautifully aswell.
    Extremely vivid imagery and a very passionate tone to it.

    Goodluck in the contest.


  • MirandaNicole
    July 3, 2004
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    Wow. This is hot but still very sensual and subtle. Beautifully written. I love it. These were my favorite lines:

    bliss shoots from swelled breasts
    to moist quivering thighs.

    Gorgeous words. Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed reading this. Keep it up. I hope to read more from you soon. Good luck in the contest.

    ~Miranda

  • kittyom
    July 3, 2004
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    this is soooooooo sexah!!!!!!!......whew........hotttttttttt stuff.....exciting as well as romantic.........a beautifully written piece........nice work.....thanks for sharing........ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~Stephanie~~~~~~~~~~~~~~


  • lekha
    July 3, 2004
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    well written

    lekha

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