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Just Stop

certain opportunities are often taken for granted

I threw myself out on the line for you
and what did I get in return?
you gave me THE SHAFT and chose her!

but come on now... I thought to myself,
"everyone deserves a second chance!"
and I gave it another go
BAD IDEA! you went back to her AGAIN!

so now I'm hurting and quite frankly fed up
but there's one plus to this whole mess:
I'm now over you and I won't go back!

hold up! what's this? you're single!?
and you're crawling back to me!?

great! this is just what I wanted... isn't it?
NO! I, unlike some, can stick to what I say:
I won't go back!

just stop this nonsense!
we can't always get what we want
and to our misfortune:
you and i both learned this the hard way

Author notes

i haven't ever written a poem like this before! the stanzas are really random but i couldn't make it work any other way! i can understand if you don't think its good but tell me what you think!
Written July 1st, 2004

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  • tieed
    July 14, 2004
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    good!!

    I really liked this poem! It's great because of the emotion and the story it tells. Oh I also like the random-ness as well hehe, "you gave me THE SHAFT", hehe I found that funny good work!


  • Anais Elaine
    July 9, 2004
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    I like it, when I write I dont think of rhyming, oe stanzas, cause Im not a good writer, I feel this piece came straight from your heart, and to me, that is what makes a really good poem or story.
    Good write I liked it a lot
    Take care
    Elaine


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    July 2, 2004
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    Although I see little thar qualifies as poetic, other than poetic justice, I see the medium of writing one's soul as the purpose of poetry. Therefore, the purpose (being more important than the vehicle) having been united with pen, I walk away improved within myself for having read this write. That is, it gave me hope that not everyone is an idiot who goes back to the dirtpile for more crappy treatment. Peace thru love. ET


  • adamanteve
    July 1, 2004
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    I like the really random stanzas.. I think it's good. It's like trying to figure out what to say to someone by practicing it in the mirror, and imagining what they'll say back.. especially the part, Hold up, what's this? You're single?
    Sounds like a pretty blah situation and I hope it is resolved now.. but I really liked this poem, you took a chance and wrote something different and it worked.