Her white flesh hidden
by a scarlet cloak, temptress
apple calls to me~
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Written June 30th, 2004
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No wonder Adam couldn't resist the apple in the Garden of Eden!
Enjoyed your 'seductive' poem, Sis! Best of Luck in the contest!
Love Ya!
♥ Maureen
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I am seriously hungry now...
What an image you have painted and I have eaten up
~~Sigh
Wonderful piece here Susan
Loved it~
runs to grab an apple
and much love~Desire
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I have always bee a great fan of those who are able to pen Haiku. (mine come out either like underdone chicken or burnt brownies) Yours here is lovely and provides as gentle a view as your full poems. Very pastoral and gentle. I adore the combination of Apple and Temptation, very sensual and difficult to refuse. This is another creative wonder here you have penned. Oh and thank you so much for stopping and commenting on my poem “The Preacher’s Song” and the generosity of your applause. Blessings and best wishes, richard
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Oh my this even made me crave an apple, mine are just little green balls on the tree at this point. Lovely write my friend.
Red -
very nice -- Haiku is an art in which not many are skilled...you are.
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ha ha ha ha ha I liked this one. It made me laugh. It was very well done. Very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing. zee
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Oooo lala this is nature and sensual and shades of eve all rolled into three little lines. This is what haiku is all about...
Applauds on this one for sure!
Susan -
Now this one I get. It amazes me that a Haiku can have such tension built into it. Makes me want to dive in myself, even though I don't really like raw apples. Even the colors lend to the message. :-)
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Wow this is so awesome, You created such a beautiful image!
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very good
Very nicely done. This had a real "adult" feel to it and yet very natural.
Beautiful images you created.
thanks,
John -
This was sweet and crisp
, the image of the soft white flesh enrobed in red satin was an amazing analogy. Beautiful use of metaphor.
Nate. xxx -
Hmmmm and the snake slithers along the grass.. and smiles with a hiss.. wanna bite me??
Great Ku' hun.. loved it..
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Now you made me wish it was Setember.....that is when we take a ride to the mts..where the apples come fresh out of the orchard ( pick your own) nd cider is a perk that we also bring home. To me it is sort of the official opening of fall season . Grat write Eve....willya share with Adam ?
Reenie
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excellent
I really liked this Susan! Just brought a smile on my face. Apple is such a tasty fruit! 
My mouth waters! lol
Love,
Lonely~
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Beautiful, sensual and well done!
You are doing great with haiku!
Loves,
Mari
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Another delightful read. You are creative.
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Excellent!
I don't eat apples but I'm tempted to after reading this tantalizing haiku. Love it, Sis!
<3 Maureen
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refreshing
enjoyed this 5.7.5 format; a delicious poem, in many ways. enjoyed the levels in this haiku...uplifting & tempting & cheeky & beautiful all at once: quite an achievement for such a minimalsit form. -
lol....I love the new name! Very sensual and fulfilling!
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Lovely,
Love it!!
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Shades of Eve, Susan What a dlightful and delectible haiku
Dee
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Lovely
Hi Susan:
A lovely Haiku with a beautiful message. I must say I can almost taste that crisp Apple. Thank you for sharing it with us. Bill -
Dear Susan,
A tempting haiku indeed. But hey!! Brida told me NEVER to have CAPITAL letters in a haiku. Evidently there are no capital letters in the Japanese language therefore they aren't permitted in haiku or senryu writing. (Aren't I the picky one?)
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
Edited on Jun 30, 11:52 p.m. because ''. -
I'm glad you posted this one sis, however I never thought of an apple that way before. haha Perhaps you could title it "Lady in Red" but that's just me . Keep up the wonderful work.
Love and hugssss
from CA sis
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Lovely piece miss blushfulmoon. I love how you have sexily described the apple, and made it sound as if it was about something other than edible fruit. Nicely done.
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Oh my.. you made that apple very very sexy! hehe
Guess im not hungry or my mind is on other things
Very nice Hon now i want someone to take a bite of that forbiden fruit
oppppsss hehe Mes bad! Mes bad!
Love this one Missyyyyyy... Oh skips off now thinking of Moms
Apple pie...
wink wink naaaaaaaaa LOL
~ Hope you have a wonderful 4th of July Sweety ~
Mina~
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yahoooooooooooo
(grin)
i really am hungry now!
thanks for the little tidbits you fed me in your im...hehe.
romance is in the air
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Thanks Jenn and Liz I appreciate the read
The name of the apple is Honey Crisp roflol should I title it that
Love you both
Susan~~~~
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ditto jenn's comment above...this could be taken straight forward (reminds me that i'm hungry...for food that is) or could have some more romantic/sensual meaning...good one sis!!! can't tell you how much i missed reading your poems when you were so ill. sure is nice to have you back!
lotsa love,
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ooo girl, this can be interpreted sooo many ways if you didnt name it apple..lol. What a seducing piece for the lucious and healthy fruit..whoo hoo you go girl!!!
Hugs
~~Jenn
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