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Reflection

How many times have I comforted myself,
Gleefully looked away from my destitute reality
Only to find myself, staring back at what is?
To escape on a lucid stream of thoughts
My mind is free, and forever it must be

Wild fantasies on immortality
Galaxy-spanning wars and complicated beasts
Occupied my childhood dreams and livened my senses
Until, with age, I saw my position in the world
A position I abhorred with ever fiber of my being

I was the lowest rung on the ladder
Subject to torment akin to a living hell
I retreated back into myself: I closed up
Totally apathetic, indifferent, and stoic
Welcome to my world

Never before has my sentience perceived such futility
All my attempts at knowing others have failed
Like a living shadow, like a broken guitar string
A misused toy which has lost all functionality
Yet whose owner cant bring themselves to throw away

I see in front of me -right there-
So close I could almost touch it
Hasn’t it always been what was, what ever will be?
I see tired, reddened eyes and trembling lips
Lips who’ve lost all dignity of voice- my reflection

Author notes

Animated matter.
Written December 17th, 2001

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  • eternalpoet
    May 21, 2005
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    5 Stars *****

    WOW.. i mean it WOW...

    such a unique imaginary .. havnt yet read in a poem.. believe me... the way you make the poem go.. i mean wow.. and the last stanza was realy fantastic.. as if a dilicious desert after a mighty meal .. .. nice write.. in fact a super write..

    take cares and have a nice time my dear friend...... just keeep it up...... your humble little friend......... ....... ....... ........ - vic ( who else?)


  • Delphinidae
    July 20, 2004
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    This was truly haunting because there are some many similarities I see here with myself. Many of your eloquent words described my own doubts. Envethough you wrote about animated matter, the meanings here go beyond that. An excellent poem.
    Edited on Jul 20, 1:07 because ''.


  • Jacki D
    June 30, 2004
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    Splendid

    Animated I said!!!! The imagery was powerful and embracing!!!! As sad as the piece is it was like my head was screaming "no!! don't end like this!!! Wonderful job!!