Slippery silver
washes itself downstream
leaving its bed~
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From user Blushfulmoon
Written June 30th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Haiku haiku haiku haiku! by FifthDove.
300 points, ended July 4, 2004, 45 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Oh you are good at this form, I dont think I've ever seen Ku by you before. It's one of my favorite forms. Awesome write, I think your nature is perfect for Haiku, its such a possitive expression.
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Congratulations
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Wow - how soothing, subtle - congratulations!
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Beautiful, Susan I can see why it was chosen as a winner in the contest!
I like the picture, too, it goes very well with the haiku.
Ummm.. about the 'Vampire' catagory.. was that a mistake or is there some subliminal message I'm not getting ...lol. Hmmmm.. vampire oysters ....
I'm just joshin' with ya....
Congratulations on the trophy
luv and
Dee
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Congratulations Susan!
Mariza
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Hmmmmm Haiku are something I never really got into but I like to read them. I just can't seem to do what you should do with this form. But you have done a great job. Thanks for sharing. zee
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Congratulations. Well done. Queen
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CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR BRONZE TROPHY Blush! Well done
~ G
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Ummmmm..
Not a fan of oysters, but you painted an interesting picture. And when I read this and the apple poem I would have to wonder where your mind is these days.... Both have a subtle undertone...
Yeah well you must be feeling better
Susan -
This one I don't understand. Sometimes I wonder if I am too retarded to read poetry. LOL! I love the picture, though!
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Thanks for all your comments
They are appreciated
Love ya muchly
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Enjoyed this, Sis!
<3 Maureen
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I like this haiku. And now I want some oysters...
good one
~whisper
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Cute
Hi Susan:
That is very cute. I like the visuals you gave us with this write. I particularly enjoyed the last line, the punch line, leaving its bed. What can I say but thank you. Bill -
why in the world would you even consider deleting this lovely haiku? it is perfection (in my humble opinion) and it will stay, or i'll have to come beat you up!
oh, why did you put it in your vampire collection? never heard of vampire oysters (hehe)
lots of hugs,
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Oh yes... This is good me-friend. I like
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This is nice! Loved the view here!
Look out for this weekend, a one hour haiku contest!
Loves,
Mari
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Well this little haiku sounds very familiar to me...roflol. I think that this just could be the jumping off point for me. Back into the swing of things here at AP.
This is short and sweet sis...I can visualize this oyster just tumbling down the stream just waiting for a special person to come along and scoop it up. Opening it to find the pearl inside.
YOU are the pearl sis. I'm glad to have found you.
Sally -
Thanks Jaunty and Melpheg
hope its a haiku LOL
May delete it wah
Love ya
Susan~~~
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Sorry not a big fan of oysters, but still you have a gift to describe things in nature (even those I don't like)
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A short beautiful haiku. I read very few of these but when I do I always notice such marvelous things. Very visionary I must say. Your quiet way of speaking is really enjoyable. Marvelous.
P.S. Your picture is perfect also , Very fitting.
love you moon ,
James
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