Sliding into the seat of my car
turning on the ignition by far
Waiting for the light to turn
in the middle of the day the sun is at the hottest to burn
The sun start to bake on my skin like sea spray
while the heat draws out the day
Very little air is blowing like "Gone with the Wind"
as the highway is playing a tune like the violin
Coming back from work creeping on the highway
cars start to march on the byway
The air starts to change
leaving my lungs gasping from derange
Air-conditioner not working
to a point of me shaking the machine and jerking
Driving 5 mph. behind a little old lady
making my day on the road a little bit shady
Little old lady start to bring the highway back to strive
thinking she is out on a Sunday drive
Reminding me of "Unbearable Lightness of being"
Whistler Mother's painting that I fell in love seeing
Then out of the blue someone is going to fast
cars zooming in and out of "Traffic" in a blast
Crashing into the rail and causing an changing event
to disrupting my life to certain extent
Ambulance and fire trucks rushing through "Traffic"
causing scenes of the day in photographic
Trying to save the day to rescue victims of prey
as hours spent on the road start to turn to grey
Singing with the tunes on the radio waiting
for the cars to move down the highway of reinstating
Then the commercial comes on of the movie "Remember the Titans"
coming to a near cinema as the "Traffic" start to tighten
The "Traffic" start to resume all the while
driving on inflatable tires that start to leak on this ridged tile
Than beads of sweat sliding down onto my face
as my makeup start to run in place
Impairing me to see cars in front of me
as I grab for the tissue to soak up sweat to a certain degree
Now the "Traffic" start to move
and day is drawing near to the end of day groove
Down the road of the highway
I start to see my turn on the byway
I stop by the gas station to fill up and ask the tenant
"The Name of the Rose" to buy for Mother's Day pennant
Author notes
I read and commented on AllPoetry.com/810637-Saved by Zero-I sometimes even almost know
Written June 28th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- contest by Quasar.
600 points, ended September 23, 2004, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I been through New York and I feel your pain. It is just bad there as it is here. Saddie23
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I hate traffic..It sucks..lol I know how you feel in this piece..and about the construction..Not in Dallas, but out in my small New York town too..It's terrible..lol This is great..I think many people get a little fed up with all of this..Great Job!!!
Much love
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Yes it can be hetic at times but I lived here most of my life. Moving back from Florida I had forgotten how much that Florida was easy to travel than DFW. Saddie23
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I live in East Texas, so I've been to Big "D" and Fort Worth many times. You've got quite a commute to work!
~~Quasar~~
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Thank you for liking my poem.You must know or live in Texas too. Where? I live in Fort Worth and go to work in Dallas. Saddie23
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this is an awesome poem....it really draws the reader in and makes the reader hear, see and feel what is happening. I loved the cadence and rhythm to it and many great lines: "Little Old Lady" which made me smile & "disrupting my life to a certain extent", so true if an accident causes backed up traffic. (This piece DOES describe Dallas freeways!) You are very talented and I thank you for entering ...... ~~Quasar~~
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Thank you, it took me a long time to arrive at my second and I'm happy to finaly be up there with the best.Saddie23
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Congratulations on your win!
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Kinda long but good write. Haley27
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I was going to make this short, but when your in traffic its like your in time warp. Every second seems longer in traffic. Thank you for the comment. Saddie23
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WOW. Long, but read fast, great description, good story integrating all the titles. Good luck to you in the this contest. It wasn't easy!
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Ok, I was talking about Dallas too never a dull moment when your stuck in traffic, because they decide to tear up the road one more time.Saddie23
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Okay this is an exact description of LA every single freakin day. Really good write! I felt like I was in the middle of the stuck traffic while reading this. The poem reads as slow and boring as the traffic you write about- which is good, very good...I am impressed you were able to do that...
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