His Smile - multiple Seicinque - by Mari Goes at All poetry

Stars shine brighter for you;
Their light in yours eyes...
What a magical sight!
There, where the moon lies.

Fireflies arouse for you;
Their light in your eyes...
What a magical sight!
Delightful surprise.

Peace and love show for you;
Their light in your eyes...
What a magical sight!
Reminds the sunrise.

Life's beauties come for you
Their light in your eyes...
What a magical sight!
Smile upon the skies.

All my blessings for you
Their light in your eyes...
What a magical sight!
You're my truthful prize.

Author notes

I already have few poems written for Tess, this one is for Tom. He has the most beautiful smile I've ever seen
Written June 28th, 2004

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A contest entry

Seicinque CONTEST by sanity. 300 points, ended July 1, 2004, 12 entries
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Yemassee
April 10

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Pretty cool huh. They exist because of you. I don't have that. There is this small part of me that regrets that, but you know that, we've talked about iy in the past.

What am I doing? I told you, going down memory lane.
Peteskid
November 14, 2007

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a lovely poem, and one can see the mother's face beaming as one reads the verses... he is a lucky guy... to have you as his mom...PK
pandora ink
May 17, 2006
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Dang, your son is a little cutie!!! I didn't know that he was on this site, so I was highly confused when he wrote that poem for me. What is his email address?
Mucho amor!
mina nagi
March 2, 2006
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There is so much emotion and feeling flowing through this piece... Each stanza depicts your love for Tom... simply wow...
mina
AngelDeAmor
February 21, 2006
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I can tell the love that you have for your son. Like any good parent has. He is a good looking lad and my best of wishes for your family.
Yemassee
September 21, 2005
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Damn, another one I already read, grrr!
MargaretG
August 26, 2005
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Dear Mari, if I had a daughter, I would have used inclusive language! All children are blessings.
Mari Goes
August 25, 2005
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Thanks Marg! Tom does have a beautiful and bright smile, and he uses it a lot I couldn't have asked for better children, he and Tess are just wonderful!
MargaretG
August 24, 2005
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There is no one like a son for inspiring love. This is gorgeous, I like the form's repetition and rhymes. You demonstrate lovely sentiment and poetic skill.
gaze
May 23, 2005
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Comment 2551, a lovely 2551 comment by the way
Yemassee
May 22, 2005
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Yay Tom. I knew this was for one of your kids, it was so pure, or such unequivocal love...it could only be a bond of mother and child. Well that is how I saw it anyway. Quite beautiful, and with a surety of purpose. You gave him life...and that feeling of amazement shows through in this piece.

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cutiepie
November 17, 2004
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Lovely
This has such a lovely flow.. I have never seen this style before but I have to say I enjoyed it very much, the words were touched as if by a butterfly...beautiful
Homer J Simpson
July 2, 2004
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a very nice poem and tribute to your son, thankyou for sharing
JenP
July 1, 2004
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Aw. I like this-it shows so many details and how you love the guy. Great
Pari Ali
June 30, 2004
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ah what a beauty of a poem filled with magical descriptions and true emotion. Lovely!
Spear
June 30, 2004
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More amazing than his smile is the way your eyes reflect the love they see. Much more than just seeing the smile, when you see all things around him exist for him; that is love in its purest and highest forms.
You are truly blessed with a loving heart.
Blissfully,
Spear -->
hugh wyles
June 30, 2004
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Dear Brida,
It's now way past my bedtime and I've had a heavy day. You said there were five poems I had'nt commented on and they just keep coming up on your author's page. How did I miss so many? Because you are writing so much that's why and I can't keep up.
And this one is worthy of better comment than my tired brain can muster so I'll come back to it tomorrow. Hope you don't mind. Are there any more? I'm scared to scroll down!!! Please give me a break, Darling?
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
Mari Goes
June 30, 2004
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You do this so well! That words can inspire you so easily, still amazes me. I truly liked your poem, way better than mine
Hugs,
Mari
simpliterature
June 30, 2004
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hehehe I'm BAAAAACK!
Would you mind if I post this one?
Kinda borrowed lots of words and lines from this piece of yours...

IN YOUR EYES

A magical sight of calmness in your eyes;
where peace and love, the moon lies.

Stars shine brighter from your eyes;
a promise of a better sunrise.

Life's beauty comes from your heart’s eyes;
sincerity of smile upon the skies.

All of the thoughts seen by your mind’s eyes;
with your brilliance I am not surprised.

The truthfulness you seek through your poetry’s eyes;
a blessing of friendship will be your prize.

Comments/Critics Please....
simpliterature
June 29, 2004
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you amuse me with your versatility to go with the forms....
i guess I have no room to comment on that... might as well find some things to mumble about...lol.

just wait and seeeeeeeeeeee.... lol.
sanity
June 28, 2004
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Wonderful, sounds better too, I know I use it and I think most do, but using the on the beginning line of a poem sounds boring (This is for want of a better word)

take care

sanity
Mari Goes
June 28, 2004
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The THE is out now.
sanity
June 28, 2004
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This is a wonderful poem, one little thing, the first line has 7 syllables, should be 6, other than that I really love the feel of it, their light in your eyes, I take it you are talikng about your son, they sure do leave light in your eyes, when you look at them you are so proud.............

take care

sanity.