She was just a little ghost
who walked quietly in the night
and even though we've never met
She won't go towards the light
I see her in my dreams at night
I know when she appears
The coldness in my bedroom
lets me know when she is near
It must have been so long ago
When you fell asleep in death
But why are you still lingering
Even though we've never met
You remind me of a little girl
that I once knew before
My sweetest little baby girl
Who passed away at four
I buried her in a lilac dress
But you are dressed in white
Her hair was brown with little curls
And I kissed her cheeks that night
Then suddenly it hit me
Like a bolt of lightning in the sky
The little ghost before me
Never had a chance to say goodbye
She was there to ask for guidance
She came back to find some rest
She longed to find some comfort
And a mother's love to bless
I know now why you linger
I know why you are here
Come with me my little ghost
And I will take you there
I followed her to the cemetery
And said a little prayer
I sat down near her tombstone
And her name was written there
Goodbye my little princess
Now go towards the light
May the angels in heaven guide you
As you sleep with them tonight
Author notes
I won a gold trophy with this.
Written June 27th, 2004
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aww this is such a beautiful poem, so sad and so sweet and touching all at the same time. Just absolutely beautiful!
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thankyou MoonStarRaven for all of your wonderful comments to my poems. "Goodbye My Little Princess" is my absolute favorite. I wrote this one when my tv set broke. It gave me time to really think and put my thoughts into that particular poem. "It's Not All About The Worm" well that was for a contest I think. "Imagine This" is also close to my heart as well as my imaginations. I so much appreciate you reading my poems and leaving comments. It has really made my day. I will return the favour as soon as I am able too. I am at work right now and don't want to be caught by the supervisor doing unrelated work on the PC. Thank you again and as promised, I will be stopping by your page to read more of you.
Avril
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awwwwwww, this is so sad, congratulations though with the gold trophy, it was awesome, good luck in this contest
best wishes as always
Star Of The Night
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It's not true for me but it may be others, thanks for commenting and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Avril
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Oh wow. This gave me goosebumps! Is this really true? I believe in these things a lot. This was so touching!
Wonderful write, and good luck!
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I am ever so happy you enjoyed my poem. Saying goodbye is never easy especially when it involves saying goodbye for the last time. I am so sorry you grandmother passed away but she will never be gone as long as she remains alive in your heart and your memory. There's an old saying that goes, "A man is not dead until he is forgotten". So always remember your grandmother and know that she rules the skies and heals the ground below. Thankyou for reading me and take care. Avril
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i have chills and not because i am sitting by a window.... this is a great poem i know the feeling because i see my grandmother all the time because she rules the sky above me and heals the ground below me and i never had a chance to say goodbye because goodbye is just to hard to say to someone who you loved so much.... she is everything to me and she always will be this is one of my favorite poems now because it captures something i only wish i could ...... but this poem ends with goodbye and its a word i never learned to say
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Thankyou so much honey, this was most favorite write. I cherish this poem a great deal. I'm so happy that you've enjoyed it.
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Beautiful!
Awwww baby!
that was so beautiful! It made me want to cry!
This was a very touching story. It was so realistic. There must be so many mother's that lost their babies. No one knows the depth of a mother's affection and longing for a child lost by early death. This was so elegantly written. Very enchanting,melancholy and classy!
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Thankyou LyricalScribe, your kindness has been appreciated.
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serene good-bye
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I'm so happy that you've enjoyed my poem Xiao-Tian-Shi, this is one of my better poem that I admire don't mind reading over and over again. Thank you for awarding me the gold. All my best to you, Avril
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holy freaky this is good! This is not only good, it is amazing! I love this piece so freaking much! Just spectacular!
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Thank you 'Open Eyes' I appreciate the kind comments to much. I will return the favour later. Avril
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this gave me cold chills, and i usually don't react that way to poems... i just read the poet's taboo, and i liked it so much i figured i'd come check out some more of your poetry, and i'm glad i did
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Thank you Lando, I'm happy that you didn't feel sad from reading this poem. It is really upliftig in a sense that you don't feel frightened by death. Avril
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This is beautifully written. It doesn't make me sad, instead I feel uplifted. I had a cousin pass away when she was one. The idea of having her around anyway, and of her saying goodbye, feel good.
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No Damon, this isn't a true story on my part, just an over active imagination at work. When I write, I like to feel the words and put myself in the persons character, so maybe in a sense I felt as though I was there. Thanks for your comments Damon, I appreciate it very much. Avril
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Avril, this is a wonderful poem. Is it true; did you have a little one die, or is it only a write? You sure captured the feeling as if you have really been there, and it makes me feel as if it is a true write. If it is, you have my blessings. Either way you are a wonderful writer to make us feel that it is true. Thanks for sharing this one with the rest of us.
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Wow, this is sensational, and I am sorry I didn't get to comment earlier. The feelings in this are very vibrant and as Flagrancy said, it leaves me speechless. I am glad this is not true for you, but for anyone who it is I give my sincerest regrets.
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Thanks Flagrancy, I will return the favour later. Avril
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This one left me really speechless...it's just the moods and voice in the poem that captured me. Great job, as usual. I loved the imagery, flow, and storyline. Take care
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Thanks Pozo, I appreciate your comment. I really didn't go through much at all to write this poem. It's not real, just a product of my imagination. Avril
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This is a really sad poem. Well done
I think it was written really well and it shows how much upset you must have gont through to write this poem Well done
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Why thank you Cold As Ice, I sure appreciate your kind comments. I've never taught about becoming a professional, I mainly right for fun and because I really love it. Avril
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this is best poem i've ever hear, truely, you should be a professional
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This was not a true story but I can see that many people can relate to it. I wrote this on the spur of the moment a few weeks ago when my tv broke down. I'm so glad it did or else this poem would not exist. Thankyou for your extremely kind comments and your applause, they were both appreciated. Avril
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Oh my jGod here come the tears. This was just one of the most beautiful and touching writes I have read in awhile. I bookmarked this although not so sure if my emotions can handle reading it another time. You did an absolutly amazing job on this one. My heart goes out to you if any part of this is true. I too have one called Angel baby that is somewhat similar to this.
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Thankyou MrAllison, I appreciate your comments. Avril
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Thankyou Jennethepoet, I really appreciated your kind comments. I will definitely keep writing. Avril
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Excellent.
I enjoyed reading your poem. I think it is a good poem. The form is very nice-- the meter is right on. What can I say about the content? I think you have managed to invoke the right amount of feeling here-- a little bit of dread, and quite a lot of (I don't even know a word for it: only parent will know of what I refer), and its not trite at all. Very nice job. -
I liked this poem a lot it said so much in so many words. I can tell you this much you sure do know how to use your words and put them the right way. I have read many poems on here, Yes they were written well. But I find this one my best. Keep it going and don't let anyone put you down. Ps I love your background as well
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sentimental
If that were true, it would be such a sad story. I don't really believe much in ghosts of people returning after the person is dead and whatnot, but I have heard of it happening, because (supposedly) the person doesn't find peace on earth or didn't have a chance to say goodbye. While this is an enchanting piece of poetry, it reminded me such of my grandmother...and if I weren't at work I'd be bawling in tears by now. (sigh)
There is naught that I can say except "perfect" and "wonderful".
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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This is not a true story Leanne although, many people can and do identify with it. Thank you for your kind comments. They were greatly appreciated. Avril
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so beautiful Avril...is this a true experience?...(i have had a similar one with a little boy)...true or not the story within the poem is enchanting....everything about this is right...the rhyme the flow the meter...all seemed to fall in perfectly....i loved it...hugs...leanne xxx
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Dear Creativecritic,
Nothing in this world means more to mean than you do not even my poetry. I would give it all up in a second if it meant that I would lose you. It means alot to me to know that you admire my poems and style of writing. You too also posses a talent for writing poetry and I wish that someday you would take advantage of that talent and allow others to see just how wonderful a poet you are also. Congratulations on an excellent report card and keep working hard to accomplish your dreams and goals. I love you with all my heart.
Your mom,
Avril
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hi mommy i know i havent been on this site in a long time but i had to comment on this poem because it is very beautiful. I love your unique rhyme style and style of writing. i love how you come up with new ideas and put them into your poems. One day i believe you will be famous because of your poetry because so many people on this website are already influenced by your writing. Even though sometimes i think you love your poetry more than me lol keep on writing these lovely poems....Love Laurie-Ann
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vERy g00d yeSS
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This poem seems to touch so many hearts it completely amazes me. I wrote this poem without giving it any thought. I simply sat down and started typing and this is the end result. I am so overwhelmed by the amount of recognition it has received thus far. Thnk you so much BehinTheSorrow for your wonderful and heartfelt comments. Avril
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great
wonderful wonderful wonderful. i am impressed by the way you convey your feelings of a lost child in this poem. it takes my breath away, the beauty that is this poem. it's a lovely one. i have no criticism for it, perfect length, u don't drone on, and yeah. just an awesome job. -
Thank you so much my dear friend, I'm so happy that you enjoyed this ghostly story of mine. I love to keep my readers on the edge of their seats, it just adds to the appeal and makes them anxious for more. Your comments were so sweet and I thank you but, a master poet I am not. I consider myself a struggling artist/poet.Lol Avril
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Thank you so much Jean, this story wasn't meant to put fear in people's heart but to help them realize that not all ghost are bad, some of them are just looking for rest and guidance into the other world. Avril
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Great write Avril. I am impressed. I loved it from start to fini', and looked for more. I usually think of ghost stories as being scary but this one is so sweet and caring it is like a breath of fresh air. Good job darlin, jean
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very spirtual and chilling at the same time,i love how once again your sweet loving soul saved the day and set this ghost child free to go where she needed to be free. as all of your work this one had me on the edge of my chair and my hair on end at the nape of my neck. your a masterful poet sweet avril
i do so enjoy your work i can't say it enough. this was stunning my friend!
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Thank you Swaneewanda, your words are so very kind and touched me greatly. I appreciate your comments and your applause. Will visit your HP and return the favor. Avril
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Thank you Lionessk, I'm not certain if I thanked you already for reading and commeting to my poem but I sure did appreciate your very kind words. I'm getting ready for work now but I would love to visit your HP and check out some of your work. Thank you once again. Avril
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Your story was scarier than mine was. Sometimes when people die they for some reason or another cannot rest. It's up to the living to find out why and help that person to find peace. Your story was very touching indeed. It is good that Hanna and your grandmother is at rest. That must have been some experience for your daughter. I would have turned pale and passed out myself. An extremely touching story Poetryality, thanks for sharing. May God bless you and your family. Avril
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Cool! Now I have points! Here ya go!...swan
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Hauntingly beautiful read...very sense-inspired...feels very real to the eyes & heart...you've done very well with this piece, I believe...looking forward to more from you (I'd applaud, but I just spent my last points to feature one myself!) So, consider this: *APPLAUSE*BRAVO*...swan -
When my daughter was five, she had an imaginary friend she called Hanna. Hanna stayed with us until my daughter was seven. When we described Hanna to my grandmother, she said she looked like my aunts daughter who had died at three with spinal meningitus. I believe in angels, and spirits. This poem brought tears to my eyes. To this day my daughter remembers every detail about Hanna (she is 25). My grandmother (who is now deceased) saw Hanna (real name Evelyn) an hour or so before she passed away, my daughter (Rachel) was 13 at the time and saw the "ghost child " in grandmother's room, she yelled out "Hanna", and turned pale. Grandmother passed without pain, closed her eyes and gave up the ghost. That was 11 years ago. Hanna has never visited us again. This poem makes me think hard on that child, and yours. Please know that she is now at rest, so that you may find peace. Be blessed. Excellent emotions penned here. Thanks for listening to my story, it was my pleasure to read yours.
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Thank you Mary6. I try hard to give my readers what they're looking for. You are also very talented to Mary6. Your poems rock. Avril
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WOW...this is amazing and beautiful...your words gave me chills..and left me almost speechless..this is just a wonderful piece of poetry and a lovely story as well..thank you for sharing...
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really injoyed reading this it was good and glad it had a happy ending .you did a wonderful job keep it up and keep writing!
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you always pull me in to the story. this one was just magic. a sad and beautiful write. you do an excellent job with the meter. never breaks and i love that. it makes the read flow on. you are very talented.
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Thanks Quickegreets, it's always a pleasure to receive your warm heartfelt comments. Avril
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Oh you had me thinking a wee small angel at first with this one, truly beautiful, one to help kids over come possible fear of ghosts and death too perhaps, reads with a beautiful serene calm sense and appeal, as if we were sensing this with you but for real. Truly a nice pleasant change of topic, and a real treat to read too.
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Thanks for the complement Aura, I wouldn't go so far as to say I'm brilliant but I do have a passion for writing and coming up with different idea and themes. It's a lot of fun, I wish every one could enjoy writing like I do. Thanks again for your wonderful and heartfelt comments. Avril
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Avril,This is absolutely fantastic-Your poem simply flowed with such an amazing grip- not for a second ,did it allow the mind to entertain another wink of a thought- it simply had this enticing effect - I have simply loved this poem-it wrenches the heart -you are brilliant! -
This held me captive. It was sweet and spooky a little at the same time. I have a ghost in my house. Sometimes my copy machine will turn on all by itself. A couple of people that can see ghosts have both told me it is an old man. He is like a gaurdian of my house or something. Anyway back to your poem. I think you are just brilliant. Your rhyming and flow was perfect. You are amazing.
I am so glad i found you. Queen
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Wow! This was excellent- one of the few times clicking on featured poems rewards me. There was nothing fake or unreal about this, nothing that made me grow bored or tired. It was a gripping poem that was able to avoid sounding like somebody begging for some recognintion because it stated with a gorgeous first stanza. The hooks were excellent and your flow was perfect- honestly, your meter and beat were right on. Amazing!
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Thank you so much Love Is Nothing, I really appreciate your comments and applause. Avril
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excellent
This is an awesome poem i really loved it and i could feel your pain beautifull job
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