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Haiku: Day and Night




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 ring of silver stars  
 nesting the sun's golden heart
 day and night unite
             
myra
2002

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Written May 19th, 2002

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  • myrataal silver member
    June 16, 2002
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    And yes Mikaela, Rainbow, Elyse and Nani ... sorry: I overlooked your comments ... thanks for visiting, my friends ...


  • myrataal silver member
    June 16, 2002
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    thank you, PHM ... I found your work interesting also ...

  • prettyhatemachine
    June 16, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    Whew, this was a lil breathtaking. i love it, it's beatiful and it's HAIKU. haiku is great


  • naninina
    May 22, 2002
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    Oh this is wonderful. You are very talented.

    '...day and night...' aren't those two what we all need?
    two that make a couple, two is better than one

    anyway...
    Another fantastic work!
    Edited by naninina on right now.


  • BrokenSouledPoetess
    May 20, 2002
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    I love this haiku Myra...and I love how you decorated it:)
    ~Rainbow~


  • May 20, 2002
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    neutral

    beautiful, so much said in just 17 syllables.


  • myrataal silver member
    May 19, 2002
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    Thank you Mike! So good to see you again ...


  • myrataal silver member
    May 19, 2002
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    Thanks for the visit, Autotomy!


  • myrataal silver member
    May 19, 2002
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    Thank you soulful, for enjoying my work ...


  • myrataal silver member
    May 19, 2002
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    Thank you for the visit frtl: and for the smile ...

  • Michael Dennis Rivers
    May 19, 2002
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    Myra, I love how you framed this in little appointments... presentation is important, it sets the heart's mood. The haiku is joyous, decked in gold and silver and in love.
    Mike


  • Autotomy
    May 19, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    inside I'm feeling giddy

  • soulful
    May 19, 2002
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    wonderfully written.. like how you printed it out..


  • myrataal silver member
    May 19, 2002
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    AAAH ...so sunny your smiles ... Shall come back later and read again ... lil lizard


  • gecko
    May 19, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    carve my sliver moon
    sunlight shadow forming smile
    dress in ember touch


  • myrataal silver member
    May 19, 2002
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    Thank you for reading, Andrew ... always so good to see you.


  • myrataal silver member
    May 19, 2002
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    Beautiful senryu, Goz! It carries such magic ... Please do more.


  • myrataal silver member
    May 19, 2002
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    Ian, what exquisite paradox! Love that haiku. Yes, you are like a king surrounded by admiring stars! LOL


  • AndrewHide silver member
    May 19, 2002
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    Beautiful Myra, wonderfully written.


    Andrew


  • May 19, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    stars above fullfill
    any dreams the sun carries
    from your lips to mine

    lol.... not litteraly your lips to mine... lol... just came out that way...

    loved this poem and all it inspired!!!


  • May 19, 2002
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    don't touch it!

    chasingtheday here
    unite with night and all the
    silvery stars bright

    haiku-blessu :)

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