I'm watching you
Watching your every move
Studying for the best time
The best time to kill you
I'm stalking you now
Breaking in your house
And hiding in your bedroom closet
I'm watching you again
Watching you fuck your latest bitch
And thinking about how stupid I was
When it was me in her place.
I got to thinking about something else.
I thought about how I loved you
Loved you with everything I am or was.
I may still love you
Right now though,
The love is hate.
The darkest of hate possible.
When you finally finished screwing that whore
And when I knew she was gone.
I stepped out of your closet
And walked hauntingly over to you
Looking at the shock in your eyes.
I lent over and whispered in your ear
"I love you"
Then I slit your throat while looking into your pain filled eyes.
Then got up and stood over your dying body all while smiling
Knowing that I finally got my happiness back.
Author notes
yes so...umm i dont kno where this came from and i wrote this at like 2:30am so yeah its kinda messed up. lol. ill proly come back later today and change a thousand things. well any help you can give me ill take...thx!
Written June 26th, 2004
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dude i loooooove this one lol well ttyl i guess oh and keep up the good work!
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OMG this is awesome! i luv how u said that u were stalking him and then before u slit his throat u said i luv u... that was really cool and bloody lol. i luv stories like this and i luv watching movies/shows with murdering and stalking lol. i always tease me guy friends that im stalking them and one of my guy friends always says watch your back. i like to watch the tv show CSI it gives me the creeps when they have a stalking thing but i think i would piss my self with fright if someone was watching every single move i do and watching me sleep and stuff. but awsome poem and it gave me the chills! bye!
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hey,
hahaha yeah im real hardcore...lmao. hey so wuts the whole thing with kim cuz i have no clue so if she says im on her side dont listen to her cuz i have no fuckin clue wut you all are talkin about. k? and ill let you kno if im mad at ya and im not...lol. cya
~amanda~ thx 4 the comment...love ya! -
You are a hardcore psycho biotch! Dang, gurl-if i'm ever making you mad just tell me before you get that mad! lol luv ya!
Lizzy -
It is really good. I wouldnt want to pee you off.
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This is a really dark poem about revenge upon an exlover. I liked it a lot
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Sweetness!!!!!!!!!!!!
OMG!!! I love this poem I really wish I could applaud but I am frexh out hun....but this...this was just so amazing you really sound like your pissed off huh?....I
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GOOD JOB!
this was kinda a scary piece but still really good. it gave off a different vibe then some of your other peice you have written. it still gives off strong feelings and it flows so well. i was actually able to see what you were talking abotu..very vividly. i have felt like this at time also....very much. welll keep it up!
~Mel~ -
oooh!!! Bravo Mandy!! its very "Stalker-esk" beautifuly written girl! keep up the great work!
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AWESOME!!!!
This is so cool!!! but I'm still going to be the evil lil editor, just because I know you'll love me no matter what I say
Alright, first... 2nd line, 2nd stanza, I think it would sound better as "into" instead of "in"... 1st line, 6th stanza, it should be whore... Last stanza, I'm not sure about the double "Then". Maybe "As I slit..."?
hehe, yes, I know I'm evil... get over it. Still, this is an awesome poem. LOL, feel free to disregard anything you don't find useful. well, love ya sis, ttyl!
~Kelsey -
whoa girl that is sum freaky shyt.... i could seriously picture it in my mind like a horror movie... thats awesome... good job!
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totally awsome!
Oh my gosh girl, this is like wow! Like it's scary yet it's like one of those horror movies where you wonder whats going to happen next so you keep on watching until you are scared shit-less out of your pants. Nice Job. I've felt anger like this-well almost like this. But great Job. You deffinately show powerful emotion in this piece. NICE JOB!!!!!! !! lol!!
~serena -
wow.. lol.. love it!i love the story.. klinda scary.. but i could imagine everything in my head.. hmm.. well im sorry for such a short comment on this wonderful.. but im just not in the typing mood.. but great job on it.! i loved it1
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Whoa, that was freaking powerful and amazing... I loved the story going on there, the emotion in it... it rocked!!! There was even regret among the anger and hate, and that made it even more real to read. You did an awesome job with this. Keep it up!!
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wow that was a very very scary poem but i liked it alot filled with ALOt of emotion good job
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Holy Smokes Girl! Who needs a horror show when you write this vividly! Although I could have done without the images in my head...I love a piece that actually makes me see what is being written and boy oh boy did this piece do that. You are awesome! Thank you for the pleasure and privilege of reading this. Great, great job!
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