Have you ever felt so strongly attached to someone that you felt you could do anything just to prove it? Do you ever look into your lover's eyes and sense it's you in there, dancing through his thoughts, stealing away his very being with past memories? Does your heart dance at the sight of his smile from across the room, making you forget how horrible your day had just been? Glancing over in your direction, a smile creeps to my lips and I utter a slight chuckle as you nearly fall over trying to slip into your pajama bottoms. The dim light reflecting off your torso seems to lighten the room with more of your pleasant radiance. Almost in awe, I watch you slip your top over your head and onto your body. You slide onto the bed and bury yourself under the covers.
"Hun, what are you staring at? Come over here," you say to me calmly. Subserviently, I tip toe to the bed and glide underneath the covers and sit up against you, feeling your arm carefully embrace me. Immediately feeling the heat from your body, I begin to relax and the worries from my horrendous day begin to slowly fade away into nothingness. I find it remarkable how you have just the strangest effects on me.
Still sitting up, I lean over and softly press my lips against your cheek. I feel one of your hands slip through my soft, brunette hair as you turn to face me. I feel suddenly frozen within your stare, your eyes seem to read my every thought. This feeling almost intimidates me, knowing that you actually care about what goes on behind my icy blue eyes.
Your hand slides from my hair and traces a line down my cheek to my neck. I lean in towards you and pull your face to mine, passionately pressing my lips firmly into yours. After a moment or two, I feel your tongue on my lips so I allow mine to pass on and I take in your sweet taste. My emotions begin to surge as our bodies become entangled within our kiss.
Your hands guide themselves up my torso, feeling each and every curve. I feel your soft fingertips trace a circle around my breasts from under my shirt, giving me goosebumps from the tenderness of your touch. I slip my hands up under your nightshirt, feeling your warm, firm body underneath. Lifting it up over your shoulders, I gently kiss your chest. You lay me back and hover over top of me. Your scent drives me wild as you gently kiss my neck and slip my shirt up over my head. My longing for you has jumped to greater heights. The passion in the room flows from the bed, spills to the floor and seems to make the room brighter.
I pull your face to mine in an attempt to look into your eyes. What I see there surprises me. It isn't the usual lustful glaze, but merely a look of understanding, hope, desire, possibly love...
Your lips once again lock in with mine as your hands search my body. Slipping off my pajama bottoms, tossing them to the floor, I do the same for you. My body shivers as the warmth of you suddenly calms me once again. I wrap my arms around your neck, pulling you into a deep kiss, as you lift my body up to yours and enter me smoothly but surely. I catch my breath at the sudden entry, pure desire and pleasure taking over me.
You slowly begin to rock back and forth, reaching the depths of my most secret places; soul and body. I utter a slight moan which seems to end up trapped, caught by your lips. My fingertips dig into the back of your neck as you press on deeper inside of my softness, sending me to another place and time, locked, it seems, in another life full of wonder, pleasure, and no troubles. I slide my fingers from your neck to your heaving chest, feeling the perspiration begin to gather over you from the heat of our lovemaking.
Senses aroused, body tense, emotions stirred, I find myself building closer to sweet release. By your movements and the soft moans you whisper into my ear, I can tell you are right there with me. My body fully tenses as the feeling of pure and total ecstasy inhabits my very being. Muscles contracting, I feel your own release from deep within me. You arch your back, your grip in my hair tightens and your movements become much more erratic. Temporarily high, my mind soars, finding the one thing which I've now surrendered completely to. Gradually, I come back down, back to reality and see your bright eyes staring deeply into mine.
Unable to find the right words to say to you at the moment as you make yourself comfortable next to me, I begin to doze. My head resting on your chest, I hear the tender beat of your heart and the slow rise and fall from your breathing settles me further. Soft dreams begin to dance in front of my eyes, dreams of one such creature whom invades my most inner thoughts, leading me back into the depths of lost exigencies and hopeful memories.
Author notes
This is my first attempt at something with more emotion added to it. I hope you enjoy this piece just as much as the rest of mine =) Please comment and I will do my best to return the favor!
Written June 25th, 2004
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you describe the sensous taking of a bath by two in the flesh of each other, the heated brushes of wetness and joy, and the long dip into breathlessnes and the soaking up of each others love until each is washed in the others passions and finaaly drained and filled with afterglow....very nicely done....Artis
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Wow, you certainly did bring out alot of sensual emotions with this story. When I try to come up with something like this, usually my first thousand drafts at it send my friends into spasms of laughter. At 50 it is hard for me to write something truly sensual. Outstanding job on this. Now I shall go and find some cold water to throw on me to cool me down...lol.
Rose
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How in the world have I missed this? This is incredible xserenityx. The passion and imagery is right on. Perfect! I love it. Very erotic. This is wonderful. I can't believe I didn't see it sooner. Wonderful writing! Thank you for the privilege and pleasure of reading this.
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Wow, I liked that one, it had emotion, bonding with this person that I can only dream about in my sleep at night. Sex is one thing but I never have truly felt both sex and an emotional bonding at the same time and I want to. Yes that's right I would love to make a girl happy one of these days mentally and sexually. Anyways great write, it had me touched and aroused keep it up.
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well done
beautifully written, full of emotion and certainly romantic and erotic all wrapped into one. It certainly makes you wish you were the one in the story.-POD -
Amazing
This was incredibly beautiful, took my breath away, gave me that tingling feeling you get when thinking about someone you love! amazing write!
*sits back in awe* not sure what else to critique, aside from the fact that in my opinion this piece is perfect
put me in a happy, dozey mood too!!!
keep writing, id LOVE to see more work like this!!!
xXx
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This is simply beautiful!!! I loved reading this. It seems to hold a better presence than some of those other erotic stories out there, if you know what I'm sayin'!
It's more than just the lovemaking... it's about these two people's love for each other... and I think that that is wonderful.
My favorite line: "The passion in the room flows from the bed, spills to the floor and seems to make the room brighter."
That is just magic right there. 
Wonderful, wonderful job!!!
dangerous-angel
~Jessica~
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beautiful!!
Wow this was beautiful, an erotic story, without all the "ya know" hehe. You had such beautiful imagery and your lines were all so pure and it had such a caring tone. I absolutely loved it! Now were you able to just make this up? Or do you have someone who is like this? That's great if you have someone like this for you, ::sigh::what a beautiful relationship!!
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This is the first piece of yours that I remember reading. I enjoyed it very much. It was very erotic and passionate without being pornagraphic. That is what I like. I especially liked the ending....the comfortable part where you said:
Unable to find the right words to say to you at the moment as you make yourself comfortable next to me, I begin to doze. My head resting on your chest, I hear the tender beat of your heart and the slow rise and fall from your breathing settles me further. Loving someone....so very much...is when you know you have a soft place to go...always. Great write.
Thank you for commenting on my poem, Angels Dance. Cheryl
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great
im usually not one that is big on the erotica... but this was more than just a wam bam thank you ma'am sex story... this is love... what passion is in a physical form... quite well done. -
excellent
wow this is good damn goos like wow.i can tell you work hard on this write it shows great job!
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Hmm...this was very passionate..a truly loving piece. It's arousing as well, but it doesn't really leave the feeling of "Ohh I wanna have sex!" It leaves the reader saying, "Wow, isn't love wonderful. This story was beautiful." Well, that's what I thought anyway. Haha..this was a really nice story. Thanks for posting, I enjoyed reading it.
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I like it.. its erotic but sensual...not sex but truly making love... i can really relate to this.. Good Job!! Keep it up!
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i like this its very good keep writing i love to read what you have to write!
vanessa -
Fantastic
You have succeeded in creating a masterpiece. It was certainly a well played out journey into a very intimate time that was full of emotion and intense feelings.
This held my interest well and the imagery was superb. I was able to feel the piece and that is quite the accomplishment.
Certainly a write to be proud of!
Congratulations!
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This was long, but well worth the reading I'd say. I'm a very emotional writer myself, and I loved your penning. It touched...as it was meant to.
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This is really good. Great job.
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intense and piercing
"The passion in the room flows from the bed, spills to the floor and seems to make the room brighter"
beautifully written. I love the erotic imagery.
Then there's this paragraph/ stanza ( I like the style you chose to tell your tale):
"You slowly begin to rock back and forth, reaching the depths of my most secret places; soul and body. I utter a slight moan which seems to end up trapped, caught by your lips. My fingertips dig into the back of your neck as you press on deeper inside of my softness, sending me to another place and time, locked, it seems, in another life full of wonder, pleasure, and no troubles. I slide my fingers from your neck to your heaving chest, feeling the perspiration begin to gather over you from the heat of our lovemaking"
passionate. I can actually almost feel and live your story. Without getting off of course lol. But I can relate to some of the images without the follow through of the act
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