Can’t We Just Go Back (Lyrics)
Seems like just the other day
When we first met and fell in love
And the stars up in the heavens
Shone just for us from up above
I don’t know where we went wrong
Or was it just not meant to be
We thought we’d go on forever
It would always be you and me
Chorus:
Can’t we just go back and say ‘I’m sorry’
Can’t we just go back, not say we’re through
Was it all so bad
We were all each of us had
Can’t we just go back to ‘I love you’
Now I’m sitting here alone
We’ve said goodbye with broken hearts
You’ve gone your way and I’ve gone mine
That empty feeling inside starts
I know you’re just as lonely
And I still feel your love so true
There’s still feelings there between us
Please come back , darlin’, I love you
Chorus:
Can’t we just go back and say ‘I’m sorry’
Can’t we just go back, not say we’re through
Was it all so bad
We were all each of us had
Can’t we just go back to ‘I love you’
...Can't we just go back to 'I love you'
Dee Garner
June 13, 2004
Author notes
This is my first attempt at lyrics ...so please be gentle ...lol
Written June 13th, 2004
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"Can’t we just go back and say ‘I’m sorry’
Can’t we just go back, not say we’re through
Was it all so bad
We were all each of us had
Can’t we just go back to ‘I love you’"
The chorus was my favorite part
I also write lyrics and sing them
Do you sing yours?
Great write
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I usually write the chorus first then do the rest of the lyrics around it. I'm not much of a singer but yeah, I do sort of try to sing it to myself to imagine how it might sound.
Thank you for the nice comment, it's much appreciated
Dee
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i cant believe that this is your first attempt at lyrics, this is truly beautiful and heartfelt... fantastic!
thanks for entering and good luck
shanelle -
I like the lyrics. I would like to hear the lyrics with the melody. I hope we both place in the contest. Yours seems like a pretty strong entry. If this is a reality piece, what led to the break up and is there hope for reconciliation?
Andy -
I totally disagree with Tess. I don't think any topic is cliche, as long as it is real to you. People don't have to write just to write something different. If this is how you were feeling at the time you wrote it, then it is new, exciting, and engaging. This is a great song. So what if there are a lot of writes out there about love? It's a pretty big part of our lives. Great work, and good luck in the contest!
~Robert -
Why be gentle you are wonderful and i know this feeling but it was resolved thank god we are back together even though all he does is tell me he has to go and ignores me for videogames but i guess i'm just to dumb to say i'm leaving because then i'd miss him.This expressed such feeling and devotion to your write i loved this you should write more songs.I've been working on trying to get these words out just as you did but i can't seem to do that so i'm glad you could.I enjoyed this so much.
Hugs.
Mandi -
Thank you, Tess, for your observations and suggestions. And I do se what you mean with each one. since this is my first attempt at lyrics, I'll probably leave it as is and try to do better if I write another in the future...maybe come back and compare it with this one...lol
Dee
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this is not bad for a first attempt. soz catz, I'm going to be harsh on this and I hope you don't mind. Firstly, the chorus was, to me, the best part. The rhyme change in the chorus worked very well. I will not comment on the content of the lyrics except by saying that I find them slightly cliched but that this is acceptable since it's your first attempt at lyrics and it's easier to start on common ground like this and work out the rhythm first. Now unto the specific stanzas:
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Seems like just the other day
When we first met and fell in love
And the stars up in the heavens
Shone just for us from up above
the first two lines are fine introductionary lines but I felt the last two could be improved rhythmically and content wise:
Seems like just the other day
When we first met and fell in love
And all stars twinkling/blazing/shining (etc) from heavens
beckoned like teardrops above (you can find a better simile)
I don’t know where we went wrong
Or was it just not meant to be
We thought we’d go on forever
It would always be you and me
hmm, the 2nd line seems slightly off paced here.
I don’t know where we went wrong
Or if our love was meant to be
like dwindling petals on a river- (I just changed that so that all the quatrains didn't get split into couplets by the breaks)
each moment but a blessing
etc. etc.
Like I said though, this is very well done for a first attempt and I would love to see you improve. Final tips: try to use more imagery and try not to split your quatrains into couplets eg.
I am so blind
I cannot see //
the world has been
taken from me
rather:
I am so blind
(that) before my eyes
you were dressed in a
pitch black disguise.
lol. please note both quatrains are horrible but I think you can see what I'm trying to say.
Hope this has been helpful
Keep the lyrics coming.
Almost there,
TF -
This is a really cool poem I liked it a lot I liked it because lyrics are very hard to write- especially the chorus, but this one is done well Thanks for commenting on my poem
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Thank you, Poetic Whisper, I appreciate the read and your taking time to leave a comment, it's much appreciated....and....yeah ....ya better watch what you say about those silly ol' songs nowdays...lol (I must agree, some of them are pretty silly)
Dee
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You could do this for a living you know, that was better than any of those sily songs you hear now days... (man I sound older than 27!) I loved it, the loving and longing, you did a great job
Karen -
Ian, you are too funny.... Maybe I could add to this with your new lines.. and speaking of going back to bed....sounds yummy
Thanks for the read and the comment, and tell lemmy I'm waiting...and waiting...and waiting ...lol
Dee
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grabs you and twirls around the poem oops sorry about your foot, i will book more dancing lessons. i think lemmy from motorhead might make this song next week it's a lovely song. i know what i am going to sing now though - can't we just go back to bed lol it's too bright and i am yawning
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Thank you so much for your nice comment, wishintreeUK. I'm glad you like the song... well I think of it as a song, anyway.
You interpreted this very well
Dee
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Thank you, Sammy I thought I'd replied to your comment before now but must have been interupted and didn't finish it or something.
I do appreciate your kind words. I guess I'm not musically inclined enough to put a tune to this. I sort of have one for the chorus. Any tune you might want to put to it I'm sure would be good, judging from all the ones you've emailed to me with your poetry. (haven't received any for awhile, though 
Thanks, Sammy, your opinion means a lot.
Dee
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This is such a beautiful set of lyrics...your words just tug at the heartstrings, such warm, tender emotions you have portrayed here. It would be such a very sad situation indeed, is this stanzaI know you’re just as lonely
And I still feel your love so true
There’s still feelings there between us
Please come back , darlin’, I love you.. here are two people with such a powerful love in their hearts, yet there is distance between them. I would hope that the Chorus would be true in this case. Well done!!!!!! This really DID touch my heart. Thank you for sharing such beautiful words with us. hugs ~Katie~
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This is really good. I feel the same.
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True Country
*My Dear Dee, This is, without any doubt, a well written, tear-jerking, straight from the heart, true blue country song. You have given no indication as to the tune or melody, but that is of no concern, for after a couple of reads a country type tune comes easily to mind. I have taken the liberty of making a coply of your lyrics so that I can hopefully come up with a tune. ...
Unless of course you already have one.
Warmest congratulations on your writing of this great set of lyrics.
Mega
Sammy -
Well, sis, you know me better than anyone and I guess it's true...you can take the lady out of the country but you can't take the country out of the lady ...lol... well, okay so it's nt an exact quote
Thanks for reading and commenting ....now all I need is an agent...hahahaha
Luv ya
Dee
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Thank you, Dominangel. I hadn't thought of Nat king Cole with this piece, but now that you've mentioned it, I think it's his kind of song also. Or country as some of the other readers have mentioned.
Thanks so much for taking time to read some of my work. I do appreciate it, and your kind comment
Dee
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Greetings, Dee. Thank you for welcoming me to Allpoetry. I have been browsing your site a bit...I think that it is going to take me a while to get through all of your stuff. I wanted to let you know that this is the first peice that I have read, and I really like it. It reminds me of Nat King Cole songs...that warm bittersweetness. I can almost hear the music of his orchestra in my mind as I read this. A very good peice. curtseys
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just so very sad and beautiful
Hey, I think there is a little bit of country in you still...This is very sad but nice..Stories, poetry and songs...what else do you have in you... -
Thanks, everyone for your reads and the nice comments. Since this is my first attempt at lyrics I was a little apprehensive about it but it seems to be accepted pretty well. I had fun writing it.
Yeah, I'd like to hear it sung also, I kinda know how the tune might be for the chorus but not the stanza's. It would be cool to hear it set to music.
Dee
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Excellent!
Hello Dee,
This was indeed a wonderful lyric. I have written many lyrics (I'm a musician and singer) I would love to hear this with music! I am sure it sounds lovely. This flowed well and the chorus had a nice 'hook' to it. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for reading and commenting on my write. I appreciate it
--Johnny -
excellent
Wonderfully done Dee!
Should make a great country song!
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Lol... Jaunty, I'm afraid if I sang this to you, you'd take back all the nice things you said about it. I couldn't carry a tune in a handbasket.
Thanks for the input on it. It's the first time I've tried lyrics. Too bad I can't bribe one of the big time singers into doing a recording so I can sit back and collect the millions of $$ in royalties ...Right... dream on, Dee!
And thanks to the rest of you for your kind comments as well
Dee
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Wonderfully rhythmical. The rhyme is picturesque and the time you spent working on this must have been hard enough in itself. I would love for you to sing this to me .... Oh well....I guess I'll have to imagine it. This is very knitted and professional. I don't think I've read a song filled with this much heart in a long time.
Just wow.
Your friend ,
Jaunty
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HIYA MUM
Long time no responce, from me that is!
This is a wonderful, deep writing! I LOVEDDD IT~!!!!
I have been so busy, figured I'd take a break and get back into writing again. Not quite awake yet but am working on it (__)> coffee is going down, and getting rid of my frown
XOXO yer daughter Veronica {english to} -
Aww!! Heart-breaking!!! And as lyrics, heart-breaking ones are probably of the bests!! Great work here, loved this attempt, which, in my opinion, you could get through brilliantly, as always!! I love the feeling reading this lyric gave and you almost got a tear out of me (have to admit that since a few years now, that IS a difficult task!). Love... sadness... and a lyric! G R R R E A T!!!!!!!
Keep it up, nice reading you again!!!!
Love,
Maru!!
PS: In a week I'm going on holidays (to Argentina!!! )
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Great Write
Your lyrics were great, the subject we can all relate to. So many of us have had broken heart but is still inlove with the one who broke our heart. I've never attempted to write lyrics in fear that someone would laugh at me but you did a wonderful job your first time around. It was an amazing write. Avril
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Wow. That was wonderful. It's amazing. I'm going through a phase where I feel just like that right now. It's wonderful how we all understand each other. Great poem though! Keep up the work!
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Cuts in slowly with solo guitar and twiddles fingers into the fade out. This is a good one Dee.
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Awww Dee this one touched me. There is beauty and sadness in these lyrics. You're first attempt is a winner.
I've missed you and wondered how you were doing. Hope all is well. Nice to see your name in lights again.
Desiree
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This is awesome. You have created some amazingly beautiful lyrics here...putting thoughts and emotions, that many have felt, into word form and making them flow with style and grace. This is fabulous! Thank you for the privilege and plesasure of reading it.
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Nice...who is this one about?
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Dear Dee,
It's wonderful to see you are back 'in production' after such a long silence and to see that your Muse is with you in full strength. This is impeccable CATZ writing with all the tenderness and gentility we anticipate from your pen.
You give a clear message of a breaking heart pleading to retrace steps and pick up the relationship at an earlier point where it was still happy and unsoured.
There are times when we would all wish to step back on our actions or words and mend the fences we have broken but saying "sorry" isn't always enough.
A splendid lyric, Dee which I applaud. Keep writing.
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
Edited on Jun 24, 10:04 p.m. because ''.
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