All those sappy love songs I wrote to you,
Thinking we would make it through.
Everything was going fine,
But I guess your heart doesnt control your mind.
"Youre the girl Ive been looking for,
Ill give you my love and so much more.
I promise to never break your heart,
If I can help it we'll never part."
To think I bought those stupid lies,
You hid behind your gorgeous eyes,
And watched me fall head over heels
Then showed me how a heartache feels.
"Everything will get better when I leave"
Watch my heart sit on my sleeve.
I hope you choke on your joy of being apart,
The same way I choke on my heart.
I think of you and tears come fast,
I just cant forget our "perfect" past.
I want nothing more than to be with you,
Even after what youve put me through.
How could you promise to never make me cry?
Convinced me you were the perfect guy.
Then cheated on me with some other girl,
I hope she really 'rocked your world'
Since your so good at taking all I have,
And not feeling the least bit sad,
Steal this horrible pain in my chest,
Dont toss my heart aside like all the rest.
Now your the one whos alone and jaded
Look at the mess that youve created.
We could of lasted for so much longer,
Breaking hearts doesnt make you stronger.
Author notes
One of my ex's promised hed never cheat on me, even if it meant saving his life. Ha. Good one=/ He did and Now he regrets it more than anything and wants to try again...i want to be with him more than anything, but im tired of crying over him...I hope this is what u wanted for ur contest..good luck to everyone! =)
BtW....Barbara Jean likes blue meatballs!!! haha
Written June 24th, 2004
A contest entry
- Cheating by Honeydew.
300 points, ended July 3, 2004, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Stellar as usual! Very nice work. I like the cliche concept of a relationship embellished in serious tone. Works well in this case! Good job, no great job! take it easy
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Omg this was an awsome poem!! it really was good and I am sorry that he did this to you, i know i dont have much room to talk because just recently i did the same thing to my girlfriend i always said i would be there and everything and then i found a new girl but found out she wasn't ne good and i felt so bad and i knew hollie was the one i loved. and now i just well me and her are back together and i know wat ur prolley thinking...your going to hurt her again. and im not i hurt her twice the first time wasn't that bad it was before we was serious and then the second time is when i broke up with her and we was serious and i do love hollie so ima not hurt her again and i know that your prolley thinking sure...but you just have to know me. anyways sorry for babbiling i really enjoyed your poem and i will check out some more
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exceeds awesomeness
KRISTENNNNN (cornholio)!!! This is awesome. I realllly liked it, it is completely under my "Exceeds Awesomeness" judgement! Lol.. so cool! Hmm.. who is this about?
CarolyN-Fonzie! lol -
Thank you soo much!
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My friend and co-worker, touchof1der, told me to come read this. She said it would tug at my heart and hopefully make me feel human...I just hate it when she's right. Damn woman!! You did good on this and I hope you find a love that is worthy of you and all that you have to offer.
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I love the way you creatively vented your heartfelt feeling and emotions. This was truly an awesome piece. As far as the beau goes...without trust, you don't really have anything. Great job on the poem! Thank you for sharing and thank you for commenting on one of my poems. Good luck in the contest.
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This write is just amazingly well written and conveys so many feelings and meanings in such a great articulate manner. I'm sorry about the guy thing. I'm pretty sure just about every female has been their and it does suck. Keep strong, you deserve better and you'll find it.
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420 stars
AMEN! that was amazing that its the first time i have ever heard a woman tell someone off, and still mentioned she was in pain. i either cry or bitch. this was a very good poem, ive been through the same things, amazing write, and all i have to say is "Preach it!" -
This is a good write, and thank you for entering it in my contest. I can relate to this well, having both been cheated on, and cheating on with this one girl. We tried it again, and the absence and wanting each toher, makes it work the next time around. AT least the same mistake is generally not made. YOu never know how happy you may be if you give this guy another chance.
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aww thanks =) Im glad you enjoyed it!!
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oh heck yah! this is so superb! i'm loving this !! awesome rant and poem,this is so amazing i swear it's like every girls
nightmare put into a perfect poem,you said everything so well the rhyme is stunning as well as the story! loved it! -
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very good write and sorry about your pain some promises cant be kept but i sorry he broke his i do believe in second chances though and you might think about it ,everyone in title to one mistake but one only after that it more of a sin .
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i feel like this is just such a personal piece - I don't think I can comment on the content at all. i do wish you would go through and put the apostrophes in where they usually would be, and I think you left out "than" in the 3rd line of stanza 5.
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thank you all for your comments!!! they mean alot to me for this piece...it was hard to write about =/
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Wow this was really awesome! This rhymed perfectly! You are gifted this could be a song, Guys suck, i dont know what gets into them, its just that they make all the wrong decisions sometimes, and they barely think before they act.
Love is a bitch.
Its really great that you didnt go back with him because that only shows that you're weak. You're not weak so rock on, lol.
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You go girl! Don't ever let anyone ever tell you how to live your life or what to do with it. No one is going to be perfect. And I am a firm believer in what goes aroung comes around.
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Very good
That's right, don't let some guy walk all over you, thinking he can do what he wants and leave you hanging. Can't expect them to be perfect, to never let you down, but there's only so far they can let you fall. Now it's time to set your limits.
Now your the one whos alone and jaded
Look at the mess that youve created.
We could of lasted for so much longer,
Breaking hearts doesnt make you stronger.
My favorite verse. They never know what they have til it's lost.
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