when he kisses me
sometimes I forget the past
and to breathe
Patricia Gibson-Williams
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Written June 24th, 2004
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Ummm
can relate to this one
Been awhile since I did a Senryu
This is excellent
Hug n love
Susan~~~
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very nice. I cant write hukus or senryu or anything like that, i always feel the compulsion to write more and more and before iknow it i have a 5 page poem. Yet you sumed up so much feeling in so little space. agian perefection.
jiselle -
This is beautiful! I think you did an excellent job with explaining your feelings in 2 short lines. Hehe, it seems like something that can be said in a movie. Great job with this
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Wonderful. I can see that Joe is a very lucky man to have a woman that is so passionate as you are. Great work. Can't wait to read more.
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amazingly amazing
Wow, this is really awesome. I mean really, really amazing. You've captured so much with so little. That's what I love about haikus. I truly relate as well- I just wrote a poem about this very thing, yet you've done it with just a few syllables and lines. Incredible! And keep writing!!!
Have a great day, Raquel
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Breath is a noun, breathe is the verb so it was right the first time. Beautiful little poem. Simple yet emotionally expressive. Nice job.
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i think this is incredable. and so true..well done
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nice. I dodn'get it at first, because u spelled breathe instead of breath, so i was conbut now i get it, so its good.
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