Your delectable voice
arouses
my appetite.
I hunger for you.
You speak of consuming the meal
that awaits your attention;
and hang up the phone
–- to devour chicken--
before it
(like my heart)
grows cold.
I want to become your banquet
Feel your teeth
-- Gnawing --
on my tender thighs.
Relish your lips
enveloping
slick skin
as you suckle at my breast.
Delight in your tongue;
savoring
warm pungent juices
as you disjoint legs
in search of succulent morsels.
But you
want to dine alone.
No longer sharing
delectable cuisine.
I lament
nights
spent feasting on
mere memories
needs un-tended.
-- Ravenous --
I long to call…
and beg you for the bones.
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Written August 24th, 2002
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You cant decide if it worked????
Oh sweetie I love it
Don't change any of it ok?
Excellent poem
Hugs n love
Susan~~~
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I think it worked pretty well, Great asimilations you use, I like the.. imagery..
Nice write.. great read
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Well Written
I love the metaphores in this piece. It made me wonder are you hungry, or HORNY? Very well done and well written!!
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great
There is wonderful imagery in this poem. The ending is great:
"I long to call…
and beg you for the bones."
It makes you think... I do like the metaphors. Allusions alays add to a poem's greatness. -
I liked this. Its different, it takes that whole infatuation to a completely different level. The ending - ask for the bones - that was an excellent way to close. I'm glad you decided to post this.
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ummmm...its interesting...I like all the metaphores.
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oh my goddess this is a incredable poem. i love all the metaphores you worked into it and amazing description. the flow is amazing as well. i was wonder when the feast was goignt o begin. very well written poem
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This poem works well- it seems that the 'food' is more nurishment of the soul than of the body and is a great extended metaphor. Well done
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this read very easily to me and the flow is smooth..great writing.
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Well done...
Very good...the only thing is the whole "delectable voice" it's kind of a clash in metaphors and doesn't really work for me. But other than that very nice job!!!
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