What will for tell the dreaded contact?
How will the stupid human race react?
Will we all go out and take a panic attack?
As we realise that we are not the only Godhead of creation
Who cares about those green men in the Martian station?
Will it go like the radio broadcast of Orson Wells?
Cause panic on the East Coast like hell?
Or will we watch it like the wars that the TV hates?
Broadcast to us at couch potato times, allowing us not to relate?
Our patriotism however to inflate
Incinerate those appalling babies
Like you would do to a rotten dog with rabies
Those children don't have scabies, it's napalm!!
As we munch our popcorn and don't give a damn
It is our side that is right!!
We will crunch them with our military might
Played to the music of "The Future" of Cohen fame
We smash the able and obliterate the lame
It was the aliens who remembered those savages, of ape like walk
That grunted and could never manage to talk
But smashed each other's head open with a rock
What has progressed in this civilised Earth?
Of gentle men and their increased sexual girth?
Weapons of mass seduction?
No, unfortunately, weapons of mass destruction
Georges
Author notes
What has increased since our days of the ape? What would old visitors think of us? Have we learnt anything? This is a protest at the futility of violence.
Written June 24th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Lyrics and Social Issues by Rivkah Lynn.
450 points, ended February 19, 2006, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Protest by Fakaba Saa.
500 points, ended February 1, 2007, 22 entries
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Hahahaha this has a great flow and its pretty damn funny
It speaks the truth...
Thanks for entering
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Nice poem, however it doesn't seem to be centered around a soldiers point of view, no does it fit into option 2, which was put a twist on it and write it using metaphores of something else, like chess and war, but about war not chess, anyhow thanks for entering it was still a good read. IndividualEleven.
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Oh wow. This is excellent! I love how it just sort of flows... like a song. This is an incredible write. And the last two lines really bring it all together.
You should read this at a protest. I think it could have a huge impact on the listeners.
Anyways, this is an incredible write, and I'm very glad you entered it into my contest.
I wish you the best of luck.
Peace and love
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This is a really neat poem... I kind of read it as a rap. I think that it is different but great. It really gets the point across. I think you did an awesome job writing this and I hope that you continue your awesome work.
Rivkah -
Thank you for entering
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Ohh...that radio broadcast, I heard about that. Wasn't it some kind of crazy joke that ended in disaster, with people committing suicide left right and centre?
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Well, I have to say that this is a very serious rant! It shows us a much bleaker side of humanity, and I suppose that it could certainly be one side of our reality. However, I prefer to look on the bright side and allow my naivete to get the better of me. (just kidding)
This is a very eye-opening piece. What I asked for was a whine or a rant, and that's exactly what you gave me. Thank you very much for this excellent look at life, and good luck in the contest. Hugs, Patricia -
Best wishes in the contest thanks for your entry.
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Hmm.. this certainly takes a stand against huge issues. I like the background, like the dragon is what you are and you're having to fight against these things, or you have to fight the dragon (however you look at it). Your rhyme is excellent, never being forced and having that sarcastic edge that I thoroughly enjoy. So true too, everyone sits and watches these things go on, voice their opinion then and there, but never do anything about it. Sad really... Fantastic write!
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this is very well written.
it's 2 a.m. so i can't think of a good comment.
good luck with my contest.
-hessa -
YOURPOEMSAYSMUCHTRUTHS
The sadesst facts are the true facts and the truest fact is this war in Iraq is built on lies and patriotism for the sake of oil domination ..this poem tells us this and more about the delusion of the allied forces and their not needed attack on Iraq nor any other country..They are supposed to be Peacemakers and yet they are incinerating innocents in the name of peace and democracy..Great write ..good luck
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I think this was a dark write and the contest was for lighter, more pleasant writes but I still liked it
Very gritty and well written, keep writing because this was an interesting poem- just not what I expected 
All the best,
Pozo
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I thought about the grim side of the planet when I was composing this contest but I figured that the aliens would be intelligent enough to see the good in us and the beauty of the earth.
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How do we seperate the boys from men if we fail to hold the contest? How do we procure more of this and that to line the cupboard and our girth with fat, if we don't fight for that? How do we cope with the boredom of a future without strife one that leaves us in peaceful plight? Where do we build once its all built up? Perhaps it needs the bomb to clear the site?
How can we change the history of mankind, one of conflict, one of war and one of self-seeking rightous times. How do we stop the religious might from causing another plunderous fight?
I do not have the answers, nor do you. I see no end to this endless senseless stew. But, I do know I dont want it to knock on the door of my sleeping daughter and cause her to become part of it.
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Thanks for entering.
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Excellent
People on this planet on are a serious path to destruction, we are complacent. It is on tv, no one thinks that concerns me. This planet is smaller and smaller everyday. I think people from our past would be appalled at how callous our society has become. I enjoy reading your work, I will be back.
Queen
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Thanks, eaglemaiden for your comments and write.
Georges -
Thanks for your generous comments on my poem. Perhaps the military need seduced to stop their evil destruction?
Thanks.....Georges -
Awesome!
"our patriotism however to inflate
and incinerate those appalling babies
like you would do to a rotten dog with rabies
those children don't have scabies, it's napalm!!
and we munch our popcorn and don't give a damn"
Those were my favorite lines in the entire piece. They just hit me. I mean, that's what we do. The military is over in Iraq killing innocent women and children, while we sit and watch it on television. It's utterly disgusting. You did a very good job of writing a piece on this war. Very unique as well. I enjoyed it, and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. Keep it up! Oh yeah. I agree with trekkor02: I liked the 'weapons of mass seduction'. -
Wow, this piece could really make a person think..and look to the skies lol..nice work...I really enjoyed it
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Do we then whistle our way to our own destruction?
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Clubs remain clubs, just with better bells and whistles.
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It it takes it to be sarcastic to get the message home, it is worth it. Thanks for the write and share.
georges -
Thanks Artis for the comments, they are much appreciated.
Georges -
well, as orwell said, "war is peace." As long as we have constant war, the country will stay intact. /1984/ is now. Wonderfully cynical piece there, I love it.
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we have advanced the simple club cave men wielded into the rich boys club that they wield under false pretenses and promises on a weaker people who they claim also have weapons to fear and still, and even against the third world mindset our boys die at the skills they have polished with roadside catapults of shrapnel and explosives, primitive but effective devices, and thus we lie mired in a place where there was no need to wander
and will have to stay there for many years...sad, but our poem is outstanding....Artis
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