I feel these cravings come from within
A desire to touch your delicate skin
The cuts were so deep, but you have overcome
Such beautiful scars they have become
I wish to touch your beautiful scars
Don't push me away
I wish to feel your beautiful scars
Please, don't dismay
You feel the same both outside and in
You feel uncomfortable in your own skin
Don't fret, my love, I'll still be here
I've made my intentions so very clear
I wish to touch your beautiful scars
Don't walk out the door
I wish to feel your beautiful scars
I don't wanna hurt anymore
It seems to me your scars run deep
Protecting your heart, your soul to keep
If you let me in, I'll take the pain
And make you complete and whole again
I wish to touch your beautiful scars
....I love you....
I wish to feel your beautiful scars
....I love you....
Author notes
Written on 22nd June 2004 at 19:19 GMT
I tried to make this a sensual one about my boyfriend's scars, but this was how it turned out.
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- Randomness........ by SparklingOutcast.
700 points, ended May 12, 2005, 34 entries
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What did you think
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this is good! You should also enter this in my other contest, too. It has some lyrical value to it too!
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beautiful
This is an unusual sort of piece. I enjoyed it because it was almost sad and dark, but at the same time resonates beauty and love. That is a difficult thing to master in ones art. Congrats on a poem well written -
Yeah, I wanted it to be sensual, but I it didn't turn out that way. So the poem isn't supposed to be sensual at all, when ye think about it.
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it didnt seem sensual...no offense....but sensuality is over rated...i liked it alot tho...the idea was different...scars being beautiful is somewhat unheard of...i understand it tho...i loved the emotion...and the feel...it seemed a bit forced...but nonetheless very good
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Heh, I like yer comments.... So simple and to the point.
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WOW just jaw dropping!(speachless)~Benji
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wow that was a really good poem!! One of my best friends can really realate to it so I had her read it and she was also amazed. Keep writing!!
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Gorgeous
this is gorgeous... i can really relate to the message portrayed here... thank you for sharing this... keep on writing... keep on being... keep on making art... ~penumbrapoet -
very emotional
this is an unbelievably incredible sentiment written for your boyfriend who you obviously love dearly....I can see you empathize with his scars...inside and out....this is a very powerful write...I feel your passion and emotion in this....... ~~~~~~Stephanie~~~~~~~~ 
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it's a really deep poem, wow, that's all i have to say
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very moving and powerful, a joy to read. I loved how the poem turns a flaw into a beautiful thing... **hastings**
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I like how you took something most other people overlook. You saw beauty in scars, marks that are considered imperfections and ugly. I also notice that you have the same background and similiar text as me, coincidence? Great minds think alike.
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This is really deeply written. A lot of people are ashamed of the things they do to their bodies, and it helps when you accept and enjoy those differences.
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i loved this poem...it's imagery and flow is incredible...it sounds like a song when read aloud, melodic poems are the best...deep and thought provoking great write
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the utter deepness to this is great.So many people are self concious of the pains they have been through and the scars left behind.Lovely and powerful write.
Thanks for the comment on my poem...most appreciated.Blessed be and best of luck in contest.
~~Serenity~~
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