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Victory

There's 3 minutes on the clock
All you can think is tick tock

You hear the whistle blow
All you think is oh no

The sweat rolls down your face
Your heart beats a steady pace

The man in front blocks your ball
The man behind makes you fall

Your team mate helps you up
You feel as though your going to throw up

The score is now tied
We only need one to get by

You shoot the ball into the goal
And your team acts if they have won the super bowl.

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Written June 21st, 2004

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  • TearsOfTheRed
    August 18, 2004
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    Sweet, dude

    hey, cool! A sports poem. What do you know? I liked it. I wouldn't have ordinarily, but you have such a way with words! lol. No but really, I thought it was really, really good. I wouldn't have wasted the time I could've been taking to do my english II homework to comment if I didn't think so. I'll be back to read all your poetry etc to thank you for commenting on my Tofu poem ^.^


  • queen Moderators member
    June 21, 2004
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    Nothing more exhilerating than winning a game, especially when it is down to the wire. Queen


  • HammeR
    June 21, 2004
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    I see you shot has found its mark
    The crowd doth roar with this spark
    A joyous cry has now began to erupt
    Its come to a close and so abrupt

    Set that pick and watch the roll
    Brush the guard and score the goal
    Block out your man and now rebound
    Put it back up and make your shot sound

    I see that you have a bit of Bball on the brain
    I hope that soon I'll get to play, curse this rain.

    Thanx for sharing this write with us and keep that game up!