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would you?

If i died tomorrow
would you feel some what relieved?
if i were to die today
would you even grieve?
if i were lieing on my death bed
would you come to say good bye?
and even if i looked like hell
would u hold me as a cryed?
would you still love me?
love me for who i am?
and will you be the one to hold my hand?
will you show me new things?
places i thought were dreams
will you be my friend?
    untill the very end

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Written June 21st, 2004

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  • shatterproofhrt
    June 21, 2004
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    This is a great write.i love it
    I cant explain in words how this makes me feel but its good real real good


  • ThePoisonTear
    June 21, 2004
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    how many questions... I like the style, really! I think that many people can relate because they're questions that make us think a lot about the people we have around and we think to be loved by them... or whatever, anyway, good good job! Keep writing!