Art pieces flagged the wall
a transposed gallery of script
this parody of verse in paint
the feathered gleaming vision’s
~symmetry
I saw words in silent sketch
orange oils that splashed a sun
above the maudlin opaques
hovering the squalored village
~tapestry.
Each tree upon the twilight’s hill
haunts with some erotica
their jagged arms fondling breasts
of turquoise-silvered clouds
~imagery
I witnessed the pantoum’s palet
nearly breathless to its lore
crashing ebb sears my heart
to see the poesy-the thrusting
~poetry!
(Inspired by the Painting 'Aurora' (or New Day), by Michael Burght)
©2002 Zealberry
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Go ahead. See what you can find. See what you CAN'T find. LOL.
Written May 15th, 2002
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this is Beautiful!!! awesome write! i loved it..! -
Okay..think this is better??Hmmmmmm..Thank you!
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Most Excellent!!
I loved this piece - well crafted, balacned well in both the soul and mind.
This last part left me wanting
"I witnessed the pantoum’s palet
nearly breathless to its lore"
This is most excellent!
"crashing awe sears my heart"
Here is where I lose the imagery - a suggestion would be perhaps - Crashing fever sears my heart" or "Crashing waves sear my heart" and then imagery you have so masterfully built flows into your final line
to see the poesy-the thrusting
~poetry! -
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enjoyed it even more second time around :) -
don't touch it!
A fabulous write, my friend. The essence of poetry...
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Pat -
don't touch it!
this is amazing...so many thoughts & images to devour & savor...tickles the mind to thinking of so many delightful things :)
really loved:
Each tree upon the twilight’s hill
haunts with some erotica
their jagged arms fondling breasts
of turquoise-silvered clouds
~imagery
delicious imagery there :) -
don't touch it!
beautiful beautiful...and obviously you are an artist of words. -
don't touch it!
simply beautiful -
don't touch it!
absolutely beautiful -
must see artwork, will look
in search for name
*takes pen and paper
to make note to do so*
hope i get round to it,
i always let things slip.
:) beautif poetry.
hehehe wonder why i came here first lol :) -
don't touch it!
Divine! -Zion -
don't touch it!
I am....in awe. Just beautiful. xo -
excellent
Wow this is really elegant
xxx Louise xxx -
excellent
beautiful imagery
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