I clung to your shirt as my demons returned
Battling with me inside
My soul fought and shed its blood
Expressed as the tears I cried
You held me tight and wiped my cheek
Telling me that it was all right
The war inside slowly ceased
And I had won the fight
I can't help but wonder what I'd have done
Had you not been there
Could they have tricked me again
Convincing me the world didn't care?
Would I have gone out for a smoke
Or even worse, picked up a blade
And sketched bloody lines on my wrist
As I watched the room slowly fade?
**I need four more lines here! Everything I think of is way too corny. Even cornier than the rest of the poem!**
Author notes
meh. true story. i'm okay now.
Written June 17th, 2004
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sorry about misspelled words
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This is a really beautiful, dark, and persevering poem. I like it alot. It proves how important friends really are when the world starts to drag us down. I've definitly been there. I am getting ready to move to Charleston with my best friend Katy Ray. ANd I wouldn't be able to go without her. THe world is just to frikken hard on me sometimes or at least that is just the way it feels. Life can be overwhelming. Keep your head up for you are an artist, and in my opinion, an artist was meant to survive to portray their pain into something beautiful. I believe we shall call the term "Masterpiece"
THat is exactly what a masterpiece is. A piece of someones survival.
Much Respect,
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This is a really good poem although I don't have any more lines. I liked it stopping where it was
I liked this poem because it had a lot of emotion in it and was very powerfully written. Well done
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i'd like to help too, angela, but i think that since the rest of the poem is so personal, like alicia said, it would be better if you wrote the last lines. i know you can think of something. just write what you feel, i guess... i don't think i'm helping very much...
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me, too, alicia, remember, I was a cutter for years. Only difference is, I didn't have an allpoetry account then.
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Wow, Ang. This is really good...I'd be willing to help you think of a last couple of lines as I've written many on this topic. But this is so personal and so REAL I just love it. Great write and a captivating read.
Alicia -
sometimes I just need a little help with it.
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There is no one in the world you can depend on like yourself. We have to see our worth, and stand up for ourselves. Know that we are worth living for. nice write.
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