River of life sweeps
torrentially onwards,
swallows and nurtures
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Author notes
Haiku 5 7 5 . Word used :- River.
Written June 21st, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- haiku for 500 points!!! You get ONE chance to win! by Mari Goes.
500 points, ended June 23, 2004, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Wow, this was really good. It breaks free from the traditional haiku way. Nice write, and thanks for the comment on my poem.
-Hood
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i love the depth of haiku, and this is no exception. Great job, well done
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i definatly love this poem...it definatly says all
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Beautiful hauki Ginger.
"River of life" is true.
Where would we be without our rivers?
Good luck and Good job!
Cindy -
Beautiful...glad I "wandered" in...come see me; I'm new!...thanks...swan
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Well done!
Gingerandhoney,
This haiku is very beautiful. Your imagery is very nice and it flows so well! The river is sure an amazing thing to see and we all interpret it in different ways. Keep it up and never stop writing. Good luck to you in the contest.
May the colours of the rainbow follow you always.
Smiles always,
Kristina
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This is good, last line could work better with less verbs.
The imagery is very clear though!
Thanks for the entry and good luck in the contest!
Mari
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Living on a river, I have seen it as it "swallows" pieces of sandbank in the spring flood, "nurtures" when floodwaters
receded--and when sportfishers go home with their catch,
and "holds" flotsam against rocks. A few years ago two brothers died in that river, and to my best knowledge, their bodies were never found. So much held so gracefully in so few words! Great haiku!
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This poem flows like a great river!
Good luck with the contest. I truly LOVE Haikus.
Renee
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I like this, you have captured well some of the many moods of the river. good luck here...
Susan -
Thought provoking
You left me wanting more. Keep it up--it's great work! -
Excellent Haiku.Short and profound.Good luck in the contest.Bill
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great wisdom!
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very good
Beautifully done. I am a big fan of the "river" theme. It was well used in my favorite book, Sidhartha, as he became inlightened by learning the rivers voice.
So many images and thoughts created by this wonderful poem.
thanks,
John -
GREAT HAIKU!!!
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very nicely done. I liked the message and image here. Haiku is probably my favorite form of poetry to write and read. Good luck in the contest
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Can you believe that, I am competing agains you here. I don't know if mine is good enough but I am competing against you. What is Haiku anyway. I don't even know what it is. Some say it is an ancient japenese form of poetry. I do you write it? Does it always that short? By the way, I like that piece of yours. I think it is great. You did a fine job here. You have a pleasant day and may God continue to give you the words to write.
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Swallowing us whole or allowing us to stay afloat as life flows on. I'm an optimist, so I hold on not letting it swallow me ..instead I enjoy the ride and the view along the way ...at least I try to.
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pessimistic! woh!
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Great piece. I like it. You did a great job here. Who knows, I may even come on here later on and compete against you. I don't think I will be able to beat you though. This piece you have hear is certainly amazing. You did a wonderful job. Keeep up the good work. wonderful piece. It is gorgeous.. I am speechless. You did a wonderful job here. I don't know what else to say but I love the intense. It keeps the poem real cool. I thank you very much for sharing such faboulous piece. You have a wonderful day and may God bless you..........................Thank you for sharing
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great haiku! i love reading haikus, and you stuck to the form really well! you can draw so much from the 3 lines you wrote expecially when you reflect more deeply on them! write more write more! !
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All free flowing. People cling to material weeds and submerge themselves in silt. Once every while, a person will let go to float freely. Those below will praise him as he passes.
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Awesome
This is an excellent haiku as in it keeps strictly dealing with natural elements and the subtle imagery rewards the reader most efficiently. Keep writing!!! -
Nah, life isn't much like a river... rivers have fish and water and stuff. Life is just boring.
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river moving, life moving.......both can swallow you whole.
This is a great methaphor. I liked your haiku very much. Good luck in the contest. Kudos. Cheryl -
Oh wow, doesn't it though. So perfectly written, tells it all. well done, you have given the an explanation to life in a haiku, well done.
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Thanks for Sharing
I really admire people that can write Haikus because I never have the talent or the patience to do one
fellow poets say that they are easy to create & express but I think it takes very skilled poets to do so Great Piece you have here, Thanks for sharing...I hope to read more of your writes in the near future ---Sara
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Well written... I like the comparison of river with life...good luck in the contest..
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That it does... I'm not that great a swimmer, either! Nice and simple - perfect for a haiku! thanks for sharing! birksy
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