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My Underwater Fantasy

Missing image
Surrounded by a sea of blue,
I'm sinking down, far down under.

Searching for hidden treasure,
I gaze intensely as I wander.

Far below, in cold, dark water,
I spy exactly what I'm after.

Gold doubloons, nuggets, too;
I must swallow spiels of laughter.

Rich beyond my wildest dreams,
I feel my heart go pitter-patter.

A friendly dolphin nudges me,
I grab hold, we splish and splatter.

In this unearthly paradise,
I'm as crazy as a hatter.

But this is still my fantasy...
I'm in charge, it doesn't matter.  




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Written June 21st, 2004

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  • g r e y i s m
    July 15, 2004
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    this is cute and whimsical. nice job with it!
    ~ O

  • Rof Cau
    July 3, 2004
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    smilingly peaceable

    splitter splatter... when last had i heard those inocent words. ican always come here when the world's too much to bear.
    za good write that leaves a smile, and a bit of peace. to me anyway.


  • Rubee
    July 3, 2004
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    and what a marvelous fantasy indeed!!!! It would be great if we could just swim the seas for as long as we wanted and escape all the turmoil and hustle and bustle of the surface!!! You drew me in with the currents of a magical and enchanted experience under the sea Love the background and the little mermaid...a very nice added touch to such a delightful poem!!! Good luck in the contest..I really hope this one wins you a trophy


  • Aimee Hill
    June 22, 2004
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    I thought this was a very cute write, and I love the form that it's written in. Samplette has a way of creating some pretty awesome forms! I loved how you seemed to bring out the movie a little in this write, The Little Mermaid, to me, is a classic I really enjoyed reading this one!

    ~Aimee


  • LastingFeelings
    June 22, 2004
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    This is cute.. a well needed giggle!I LOVE THE LITTLE MERMAID! Great write! and thank you for reading and commenting on my poetry!
    Sam


  • Touchof1der silver member
    June 22, 2004
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    Bravo! Bravo! Bravo! I love this! This is very sweet and the last two lines started my day off with a must appreciated chuckle. Your background is awesome and oh-so-perfect for this particular piece. I must say I also enjoyed reading through your author's page. You have filled me with many little tidbits this morning. Thanks you for the pleasure and the privilege of reading you and thank you for commenting on my last poem. Great job!


  • Maureen silver member
    June 22, 2004
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    Hi Sherry,
    I'm happy you enjoyed this! I enjoyed writing it!


    <3 Maureen


  • Sherry gold member
    June 21, 2004
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    Wonderful enjoyed

    Maureen,
    This is wonderful enjoyed you be great with children's poems because you capture the excitement in them so well....like this and your last the disney one...... Great piece filled with fun Love and hugs,Sherry


  • Maureen silver member
    June 21, 2004
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    Dear Hugh,
    So, you're already planning to replace us?
    That's okay (sniff, sniff), I understand.

    I enjoyed the rest of your comment so I'll forgive you this time. I'll be visiting you soon to read one of your ditties!

    Love and Hugs,
    <3 Maureen


  • hugh wyles silver member
    June 21, 2004
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    Dear Maureen,
    What a delightful write!! If, with your hoard of gold doubloons and nuggets, you take blushfulmoon on vacation with you as she suggests, it will leave quite a gap in my harem till you both get back. Who knows though? There maybe some new initiates by then!
    Well, if you can have your fantasy, I can have mine!!
    I love the cool blue background and your cool poem. COOL babe!!
    Applause and good luck in the contest.
    Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.


  • Maureen silver member
    June 21, 2004
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    Thank you, Sam! I'm glad this made you smile..that makes it all worth-while!

    <3 Maureen


  • Samplette gold member
    June 21, 2004
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    This brought a smile to my somber face...and for that I thank you....
    Very nicely done.
    Thank you for entering.
    It has been a while...hope you are well...I will have to come visit you soon...
    Sam

  • Maureen silver member
    June 21, 2004
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    Thank you, queenie! I'm glad you enjoyed this!

    <3 Maureen


  • Maureen silver member
    June 21, 2004
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    Thank you, Cheryl! "The Little Mermaid" is my favorite Disney animated movie. I have a poster of Ariel and my sister made me a really cute doll. Love the story and the songs! I agree with you about her age when she got married, though..even 18 or 21 can be too young.

    Maureen


  • Maureen silver member
    June 21, 2004
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    Welcome aboard, my friend! The more, the merrier!
    How about Cancun? We can enjoy mexican cuisine and beautiful scenery! (but I'm open to suggestions)

    Love you, too!
    <3 Maureen


  • queenie gold member
    June 21, 2004
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    simple and sweet

    this is so sweet.it is simple and it is beautiful.it is well-stated and not bogged down with too mant descriptions.the background lures you into the fantasy.i love it.


  • MagicLady silver member
    June 21, 2004
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    What a sweet poem, I always loved Ariel. As a mom, I wished she was older than 16 when she got married. Why don't we change the fairy tales to 18 or 21....can't we do that? Love the background as well. kudos! Cheryl


  • June 21, 2004
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    Ah crikey...I thought "nuggets" was a euphemism! It was the title, the whole fantasy thing had me swimming in the wrong direction. (Dirty minded Sailor!)
    Treasure would do just fine though. I enjoyed the whimsical feel of this (once I got over the embarrassment of my first thoughts) and liked the little mermaid too. Cheers


  • angelica silver member
    June 21, 2004
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    Ahhh Maureen, what a fantasy, it sounds great, I think I'll join you and Susan, let me know where wer're going. Wonderful my dear friend~Love you~Joan


  • Maureen silver member
    June 21, 2004
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    Thanks, Sis! Where shall it be? The Virgin Islands? Hawaii, Tahiti? You name the place..I'm loaded! (rich, not drunk!)

    Love Ya!
    <3 Maureen


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    June 21, 2004
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    dreamfilled fantasy~

    Oh sis
    This is a wonderful light hearted poem to read
    I would love to splash in some water and find some golden dubloons
    You and I would go together on a vaction for sure & leave our men folk at home
    A dream of a fantasy sis
    Love it sis
    Love you too
    Good luck in the contest
    Hoping you get a trophy on your mantle
    Love n hugs sis
    Susan~~~

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