It was pumpkin, delicious,
friends with whipped cream.
Oh, subordinate.
Oh, whipped cream,
you love that dominatrix shit,
the way you come out full of nitrogen.
PFFFFFFFFFFT!
That's the sound of artificially whipped cream.
Poor baby,
Come on crawling to mama, she's got a bosom,
she's got a bosom full of water to keep you sat-sat-saturated.
There's something so soothing
About being disabled and sitting inert
On a giant bed that isn't yours.
Ohhh, yeah, and with the eyes?
And with the grin?
And with the beat and rhthym
Digesting the food and pumping the blood...
and it all gets thicker as the lung gets thinner
and the extremities, they drift away,
fly-fishing lines.
What words have you got held in?
The ones that come out in circles and swirls?
If I gave you a punch in the gut,
would you give me a little boy smile and shake your curly locks?
Hopefully.
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Written June 20th, 2004
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Wow. I am totally intrigued by this one. I agree with the others in saying that it morphs a lot. I'm not really sure what it's about at all, but that's kind of what makes it so very great and interesting. Your writing reminds me a lot of a great poetess (I hope you don't take offense), Sylvia Plath. She had the same sort of awesome intellectual and yet evasive style. You could only guess as to what her poems were really about but you could get so much out of them. Great job! I'm really very very impressed!
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hmp...I like this. Its quirky and the narrative is very entertaining. Nice work
janex -
This is nice. It is different from a lot that you see out there, but that doesn't mean it's not good. (Cause it is
... It's exactly what you called it, a polyphony. Very nicely done, I hope everyone who sees this can appreciate this write at least as much as I do, because I like it alot, and I think it was a good idea, and that good idea turned into a really nice poem. Keep writing cause you're doing good so far ... ~ 
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Strange and deranged. Just the way I like it.
By and By
Evy -
Είμαι εν&#
Αυτό δεν είναι πολύ καλό, τελειώνει τη σταδιοδρομίαποίησής σας. -
Just odd enough to be interesting. Well, just as I think this poem is about one thing, it shifts morphs into another. It is elusive, difficult to label. What I fear it is about is something I'd rather not mention...lol. It is intereting though, lends itself to obscurity, which is good.
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