The sharp side of MS sword is here
And again I must back down
I dare not use my swords with MS
For I will lose in the end
But then,
My mind goes into POSITIVE
MS swings the sword harder
But the mind is a powerful thing
I take myself else where
MS is lost in the positive forest
Me looking out
Watching its every move
Feeling the sharp lashes of the sword
With my heart bleeding
I release my body
From my mind
And take myself beyond
MS's sword can not touch me
But this does not mean I have won
Its trickery and mind power
That has released me from the sword
God only knows
Who the winner
Will be
But for now
I am the one
Author notes
I wrote this because I have MS and want to let people know what it is and what it does to you.
MS, Multiple Scolorsis
Written May 14th, 2002
A positive mind and soul followed by the heart can help heal from within...daily conditioning of a busy life that keeps you higher then the illness itself. Go deep within your inner self and know every movement that you body feels...study each one closely to keep mind and body together as one. Positive is the best med for any illness.
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Comments
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Thank you for sending me the two titles. I appreciate it. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Ok, this almost had me crying because my stepdad had MS for the last 15 years. 11 days ago marked the 1st anniversary of his death. My mom's house burned down with my stepdad trapped inside because he could only use his walker to get around and no one else was home. This was emotional for me. Great write!
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I am sorry for your lose and how it happened...I can't even begin to imagine such a thing happening...very sad. I have had MS for 30 yrs now...and I am still here...glad that you enjoyed my poem, thanks for taking the time to read and reply...God Bless
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Please put the titles of both poems you entered so that I can compare the two. Thanks
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I hope that you are doing well!
And that the New Year is positive and pain free for you. My step mother has this illness. I just took a class about it. Plan on doing a series of consciousness raising contests/classes through our group for disabilities. Multiple Sclerosis is going to be one of them. I have read this heart-rendering poem before. It is truly inspirational. Thank you for placing it on our group's reading list.
Karen
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Very interesting imagery. Very powerful...comparing what MS does to what a sword does. I see the hope within your poem.
Thank you for sharing this!
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Excellent write I know what a postitve attitude can do. I've had cerebral palsy all my life nd have dealt with it. I hope your doing well. Great write.
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So very true, it is a state of positive that wins. It is a constant state of mind on love based thoughts to keep the entruder at bay.
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MS runs in my family it is such a dibilitating disease. Yes being positive does help in any illness maybe not with the condition itself but with our inner self. Thanks for sharing this heartfelt write, you will continue to be in my prayers. Hugs Theresa
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As another who lives with MS, all I can say is ovations.
My motto is adopted from the National MS Society...
"I may have MS.................
But me doesn't have me!"
Find Peace and keep writting,
Marianne
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Thank you for sharing this poem! I also have MS, somedays it does get the better of me. But, for now today I still have me intackt. ~Sie
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This is excellent writing. Thank you for sharing about your sickness, it's interesting to read about something I know so little about. My favorite stanza is: "My mind goes into POSITIVE
MS swings the sword harder
But the mind is a powerful thing
I take myself else where "
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I love it! This exactly the kind of thing I was asking for! Thank youfor entering!
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You poem have a very good point. no matter the situation or surrounding a possitive mind always make things jsut a little bit brighter and eaven in your biggest struggles life seems a little more bearable. Great poem and thanks for entering my contest.
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There are some lessons here for those of us who suffer from other permanent disabilities. You are fighting a courageous battle; I like the swordplay imagery.
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Reading this makes me realize how often i let myself be dragged down into the negative thinking, and that surely does make everything worse. Thank you for pointing out that keeping positive is important to physical well being. Very nice poem. I also like the presentation- its curves remind me of a trophy.
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Powerful poem!
BRAVO! BRAVO! the "spirit" that is in us?
Isn't it amazing! I am just floored by the beauty and
strength in this poem! May we all learn from your
wise lesson written and kindest of words.
ears2hearyou
Kathleen/Seattle.
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On the reading list it is showing that I did not comment on your poem, so I will do it again. What an amazing write, wonderful emotion and imagery. I so enjoyed reading it again. Have a wonderful day my friend Theresa
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Wow what an encouraging write!! The way we view life can be helpful or hurtful. What a wonderful write so full of amazing emotion and imagery
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I really like this piece, although I will say that when I first read the title I thought it was going to be about gangs... You know the Central American gang MS, but you have a great not a gang write here, good luck with this poem in my contest.
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Truly a battle of wits! Mind over matter, cliche, but true. We take great hope as we win the small battles, but know our enemy has time on his side when it comes to the war. I admire those who can face such terror on a daily bases and still smile with ligitimate joy. Where does such fortitude come from? Surely God has made another wonderful creature in you. Great job on this piece. Blessings, Doris
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war like
I liked this it was like I was there. Very well written I like the word content. Good luck fellow poet!
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This made me weep! It is such a day in and day out battle, as you so eloquently put it with the metaphor of "MS's Sword". I can only imagine what you are going through based on my own experiences with pain and dibilitating depression and anxiety.
With fibromyalgia, suspected lupus and developing arthritis, I am familiar with a little pain, but usually it is transitory. There have been times when it was unrelenting and I cried in pain and fear. The stabbing, burning, aching, cramping all came to mind as I read your poem. The "sword" is such a perfect visualization that you use here.
My pain is no comparison so what you are going through. I have only tasted it and fear a day that it may overtake me and there will be no way to control it.
I absolutely loved the redemptive and hopeful aspects of your poem and how one can use the mind to escape pain and disability and to rise above and beyond it.
Yoga and meditation has worked wonders for me, and this is what came to my mind as I was reading your fantastic poem. It takes a lot or work, practise and discipline, but it is like there is no choice, and the benefits are amazing. I believe that yoga was developed over thousands of years in India to help us to become enlightened, free us from our bodies and prepare us for death and the transition. It is great for pain - but when all else fails - I thank the Divine for the medication that helps relieve pain and anxiety. And didn't drugs develope out of the study of plants and herbs and how they benefit us? If used wisely and properly, there is no shame here.
I so related to your write. I often think of how my disabilites may win in the end, but for now, I am still winning for the most part, like you say dearest;
"Feeling the sharp lashes of the sword
With my heart bleeding
I release my body
From my mind
And take myself beyond
MS's sword can not touch me
But this does not mean I have won
Its trickery and mind power
That has released me from the sword
God only knows
Who the winner
Will be
But for now
I am the one"
I cannot compare myself to your noble courage and strength; I can only learn from what you have said here in your inspiring, utterly divine poem. I still have tears welling up in my eyes from reading your words!
You are so right about being positive. We might as well make the best of things until it is over, but like a poet and friend I admire said, "It's not over yet!"
Light and healing always,
Karen
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Thank you for your nice comment on my poem, "MS's Sword," I am glad that you could some what relate to my words. I wish you the best with your health, an hope that this new year will bring better tomorrows. Thanks again for your comment, I enjoyed every word.
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I do not know very much of MS since it has never touched my life in anyway and this poem has given me a small idea of what it is like. Altough I do deal with epilepsy in my life so that is my battle and I like what you wrote in your authors notes "A positive mind and soul followed by the heart can help heal from within" I really think that is true and I do my best to do that it it seems to help and it helps to have people who love you and want the best for you. Thank you very much for this insightful and touching poem. Good luck and the best to you in any other contests you enter.
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Positive - for sure THANK YOU
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Thank you for commenting on my poem, "MS's Sword," I am glad that you got some positive energy from my poem, thanks again
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Oh I absolutely agree with every word! I'm suffering from something that it's said doesn't kill you but makes you wish you were dead. It does kill you if left to its own devices but my point is that this saying about it isn't true for me though I know it is for others and the reason is that I'm very positive most of the time. Today not so much but your poem's reminded me to be so thankyou!
Peace Georgia
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staying positive is usually the best way to deal with anything. I admire your powers of meditation- to take pain away from your body- to bear it. If only I could do the same... this was an interesting write and in the end I hope you win.
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Interesting.
I imagine Ellis would like this. He likes poems that make you think, and he is a very astute thinker.
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next time don't put your name under the poem...
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I had a cousin who lived with Multiple Sclerosis, and though I was young and can’t remember him well, I do remember he was a very cheery person and you never saw him down. I can’t begin to understand what it’s like, but I admire your courage and determination. A sad but uplifting poem. Thank you for entering the contest.
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for people like you to face the world is enough...
but to face the world with this monster is a struggle that brings tears to my eyes...
Yet face the world with courage and determination!
I wrote a piece about gecko and his struggle...
it's called You Smile softly.
check it out if you want....http://allpoetry.com/Poem/75988
I did enjoy this!
Keep penning on!
Bill
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I wanted to tell you I admire your courage. It's very good to be strong and fight back. I liked your poem too. It's very well written and brave.
~*Destiny*~
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Excellent Poem
WOW that was really good. My mother in law has MS. I have seen her struggles. She can barely walk. She tires easily. People with this disease have so much courage. I wouldn't want to have to be in their shoes. Thank you for sharing this. Queen -
I know a few things about that debilitating disorder, and even know a person with it. The special thing about (most) people with disabilities is that they still manage to keep a positive attitude, especially if they were born with a disorder or defect. There are some benefits that come with having a positive outlook on life...it makes things easier to cope with. Everyone will get tested in some form or another; even if a person is born healthy, it doesn't mean that they won't ever have health (or other) problems in the future. Sometimes, I wish I could borrow their attitudes...perhaps it would benefit me as well!
Lovely tribute to these sweet souls.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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This was different... I don't understand it
I tried to re read it but it still doesn't stand out a clear to me I dunno it's your poem though, so I guess it rhymed a lil bit that's cool...
J
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Pru, I hope to find you feeling well and doing alright.. I know alot about MS as my parents were involved with MS Society here for many years as they have several friends who have the disease. Thanks for sharing this write
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A beautiful write pruedence. I have some friends with MS and am familiar with the struggle, and the benefits of positive attitude. Keep it up! and thank you for sharing some of that positivity with others.
gypsy
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You spelled lose like loose, but besides that the poem was really good, although it took a little time to get the picture with MS and a sword... maybe you can fill me in, I'm trying to piece together this puzzle... let the light in
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i feel like i've read this before, but i could be wrong. i'm always drawn to those "against the odds" pieces and this is one of those. well done, and take care.
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wow...that's brilliant. it's such an inspiration and gives me hope because my mom has a higher risk of developing MS because of a nerve that got pinched in her leg and made it go numb for a long time and i know a woman that has MS and it's so hard to watch the disease eat away at her and think that that could be my mother someday...but this helps so much and will help me sleep more easily tonight...thank you so much, it's a very beautiful thing that you have just written.
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I think if you can look at life positively especially when in a struggle, then you always come out a winner. Great poem. Best wishes to you.
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Well, nobody get out of here alive. But you can still make the best of what time you have. Keep writing!
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This is an amazing write
Thank you for sharing a part of your everyday ordeal, with us. I am sure it is a constant struggle I live with a neuromuscular disease everyday, friedrich's ataxia, its very rare, and you probably haven't heard of it, I've been using a wheelchair for almost 8 years now, I'm getting used to it, but that doesn't mean I like it 
Take care,
Karen
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Ah-ha! The infmaous piece, "MS's Sword." It was great, and I'm glad that, even after 4 months or so, when I saw this piece in the featured box, I remembered the name. For, long ago you read a poem of mine and told me to check this one out. Unfortuantely, I checked through all your poems and could not find it. Untill now And I'm glad I read it. It was a great poem, I enjoyed the read. Thanks again!
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MS is a terrible thing to have. You seem to be coping with it by facing it as you have by writing this piece. I respect people who can do that because it takes courage.
God bless you!
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Kim,
With God you will always be the winner of the battle.
Yvonne
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gecko..join the crowd..hmm that is what MS does! lol hope this finds you well..thanks
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soulful..I know migraines well..I suffer with them also...I take meds to help..but it still keeps me down for days...I am glad you will keep reading..I love your comments!
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Aliana..thank you for reading my poem..and commenting..it means alot to me too!
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don't touch it!
((hugs)) Kimberly, great write. Yes you definately are the one.
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yes Kimberly
my nuero system has shot through
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Kim so far i have enjoyed your poems.. staying positive an venting in a few poems is therapy for the soul..i do hope you keep posting cuz i'll keep reading.. migraine or no migraine .. -
soulful, I feel for your uncle...I have been lucky..been dxed for 24 yrs..and if you met me you would never know..that is the worse kind..I look great..but the MS lingers within...I stay positive...it does help..and you will see plenty about my struggles with MS here...it is a great venting tool for me...thank you so much for commenting..kim
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gecko..what is your health problem..is it MS too..sorry I think I miss something along the way...hope your day is full of lovely words...kim
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my lil girls uncle has Ms. at the point he is right now he can't even write most days an i shed a tear for the freedom he is loosing... i know sometimes this is a tough subject but would like to read more on this ugly monster -
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you is very welcome
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was just gunna go find a couple of mine about the dreaded lergy that i had posted here
lol
I have days where a cane is enough and others where i pull out the old walking frame
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and then
I hate summer
out comes the chair
lol
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qecko..thanks I am not alone then!..I walk with a cane..but other then that you would not know I had MS...lol but it is on the inside always..that is my hell..so glad you could relate...I have many poems with my dealing with my monster...thanks so much for your comments!
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excellent
Kimberly
you are the winner
no matter how much this disease attempts at our ruin
stand on the lead weighted feet and be proud knowing that
the disease will not beat you
NO MATTER how bad
hey um
if I get me wheel chair back one day wanna have a drag with me round the corridors of AP??
hug hug hug hug hug
I can safely say
i know these words
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