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Subjection ( one liner).



A woman's power for all to see, is as to make a bower from one daisy.



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Written June 19th, 2004

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  • Anais Elaine
    June 29, 2004
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    wow even your one liners are good
    Like Gill, I used to love making daisy chains, and still do with my 7 year old.
    Take care
    Elaine

  • Jade Darklinmoon
    June 29, 2004
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    wow i how true that is. keep the writting commin


  • passionvine
    June 20, 2004
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    Superb

    Pithy, witty, and full of wisdom. You've made a garden of verse with a single flower line


  • BillS2
    June 19, 2004
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    Wonderful

    Hi Gingerandhoney:
    A very profound statement and the conviction to stand behind such a statement. Wonderful! Thank you for sharing this write. Bill


  • S A Adelmann
    June 19, 2004
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    This is a really nice, succinct poem - you have said enough, not too much - and with a great economy in your words. Nice job!

    Scot t


  • June 19, 2004
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    very good

    this was great oneliner you did a fine job! wish i had a good oneliner but i'm not good at it lol.well i look for more of your work as they come out .good luck in the contest !


  • Smilingspider
    June 19, 2004
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    Nice and thought provoking piece

    I think you are one of the few people to use the word bower on here, I have thought about it but then thought no, some people will go wha?

    Nice piece, line. good luck.

    Jules

  • MeMySeLfaNdi16
    June 19, 2004
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    This is a really good idea. I liked you're "one liner" a lot. It showed so much, in so little! GREAT! emily


  • MargaretG
    June 19, 2004
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    That really is doing more with less! Excellent rhyme, and I love the sentiment! More power to you, and good luck in the contest.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    June 19, 2004
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    very creative indeed, good luck with the contest.. I used to love making diasy chains when I was little.. cute imagery
    ~GILL~xxxx


  • sweetbaby
    June 19, 2004
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    Very pretty. It's a beautiful one line. I'm not the best when it comes to short form. Not at all... Break a leg in this contest! I like it alot.

  • MarKKraM
    June 19, 2004
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    What is it I like about short form so much, Maybe the fact that I am lazy and enjoy just having little to read, or maybe the fact that I believe if you can capture so much without having to use unneeded words. Then that is impressive, Great job on this poem, keep up the good work, ...KraM...

  • empire of dirt
    June 19, 2004
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    I love daisies. Beautiful one liner, and good luck in the contest. You do deserve to win.


  • duana
    June 19, 2004
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    nicely said, and very creative.


  • Molassis
    June 19, 2004
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    Awe this is so sweet! I like the rhyming in the same line. Good luck with the contest and I hope that you win. To me a one - liner is harder than writing a whole poem! You got only one line with which to make a point! You did reall well with this! ~Melissa

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