Handling himself well
accepting the trauma to come
to his mind
in the audience
participation
he partook in
a rather extravegant
purpose
a plastic
ceiling crowded
overhead
barred in
and locked away
he could not escape
salvaging what he
could of himself
he
laughed nervously
.
Author notes
P.Stephenson: "As I watched him play proficiently and enthusiastically with his caged penis in front of three thousand hysterical people, the words thirty years old flash into my mind." Your four words, two of which you must include int he poem are: trio, salvage, bind and plastic.
i felt a sense of nervous exposure from this quote.
Written June 18th, 2004
A contest entry
- 1000 POINT CONTEST: Inspirations & Interpretations by Faded.
1000 points, ended June 23, 2004, 29 entries
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the last line was well worded. i loved it. flow was..alright. seen better from you, seen worse.
Mylee -
Dignity, pride. In the end, those are nothing more than words, eh? Love the poem, it implies so much happening, and you can really get carried away in your own imagination with this poem.... Thanks for entering!
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A thoughtful interpretation (and impressive considering how quickly you put it together.) You really captured the percieved mood of your quote and reflected it in your subsequent poem.
Some fantastic wording scattered about, particularly in these lines in the middle portion:
"he partook in
a rather extravegant
purpose
a plastic
ceiling crowded
overhead"
I enjoyed reading this and sincerely hope that you enjoyed the challenge.
~Faded
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a crowded plastic ceiling...this stuck out for me.
I think you have expressed the state of this person very well.
I thought the title was great also.
~ O
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Heh, wow. Interesting quote, and interesting poem I liked them both though. Best of luck in the contest, and great work!
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LOL Duno why but this struck me kinda funny. Maybe I got a sick since of hummor??? errr imagine that! Great write sweety! tahnk you for sharing! Take care of you! .............Sheila
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