Angel(a), I am not
I sweetly wish for your brains to rot
Try to get into my pants too soon
And I'll castrate you with my melon spoon
And if you tease and manipulate my heart
I'll slowly and carefully tear you apart
And, by now, you surely must know
My soul is not as white as snow
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Written June 18th, 2004
A contest entry
- What's In A Name? by .
300 points, ended June 28, 2004, 23 entries
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...*lol* this was funny...
I like reading funny things...
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Very nice write, The mellon spoon part is the greatest. Im not to keen on the castration thing but hey not many guys are lol.
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lol..this was cute and very humorous. I think the melon spoon is going to be your trade mark. Go on girlie! Tell them like it is! Excellent choice of wording and rhyme in this piece, it was a sure joy to read. Thanks for sharing this!!
~Aimee
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I didn't want to stretch the poem, and that was the only way I could end it. I hate forced rhyme myself, but I can't think much more than life savers = yummy! right now.
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I adore this...bwahahaha evilness. I love the little touch in the first line of "angel(a)"--that was good. The entire piece makes me squeal with cynical delight. Hehe. My only piece of criticism (other than beckys pointed out grammatical error) is that the last two lines seem somewhat force-rhymed...but i still like!! muy muy mucho!!
Alicia -
I never said I was a femme fatale!!! I'm not hot enough!
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Fabulous! It's always funny to see when the girls with frilly girly names turn out to be kickass femmes fatale. Hurrah for the melon spoon- my weapon of choice! Although I also suggest those serrated grapefruit spoons and wire cheese cutters- makes nice even slices!
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i wish there was more about u then jsut so few of words...this was beautiful too....i really liked this poem a lot...this was gorgeous. Anyways you are awesome becuase this is soooo pretty...you have a way with words....lemon.
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I know!!! I wish I could bake backgrounds, because I'd put a melon spoon here!
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Ha! Extreamly amusing! I think its good to see a woman who sticks up for herself...God I hate doormats!
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*squeals* Yay! Greatness!!! It's uber-spiffy... The only thing I noticed was that, in the second line, the 'to' needs an extra 'o.' Yay, melon spoon!
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