soaking it in
observing
the inevitable
is this
what's
to become
of me
how much
longer
do i have
before youth
abandons
and time
sets in
Author notes
Written June 18th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Something For Myself... by My Darkness.
300 points, ended June 23, 2004, 9 entries
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It's like looking into a mirror and seeing yourself, not just your appearance but your thoughts and your soul...very good write, touching to say the least...well done my friend, thanks for entering in my contest and good luck to you
take care
-Stac- -
Fairly simple, but definitely good. I liked it alot. I believe youth begins to to fade when innocence is lost, but that's just me.
Good poem!,
~Hannah -
Interesting, I like how you drew out the words, like you were trying to extend time or slow it down. The spacing set the mood well. This poem really captures the feelings of someone who hits a milestone in life and is wondering if they're getting old.
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I really like the style of this poem. Its like a cliffhanger, dripping words into full sentences. Awesome write.Good luck in the contest!
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Short, sweet and to the point. Syllables and lines aside, this reads rather haiku-like to me. I hope this makes sense as it would take too long to explain. Good job!
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I like this. I think it's a very good way to put it. Sometimes I stop and think, oh wow, ya know, I'm getting older and soon I'll have to be all adult and that's no fun lol
Great poem.
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I have my moments when I feel age setting in...uggg and I'm only 22!
I think you have definitly captured that questioning feeling that forms in ones brain about getting old.
peace and love
Susan
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I definitly think its all in the mindset. Ive been feeling a lot like this lately because my teacher reminded our class that this was the end of the beginning for us. The fact that are childhood was gone was really disheartening but then I realized that its not. I can grow and mature but still stay a child. Great job and thank you for sharing!
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I like this, but its hard to say when youth ends and when "getting old" begins. Maybe its all in the way your mind is set? Who knows. Anyway, very nicely written, and I hope you do well in the contest, good luck!
~blessings~
~rora
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