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Through rainwater fall

Through rainwater fall, blast light, through-out the sky
        this is how the day was, that day destined to die
     fortold of the suicide, born like a raindrop to fall
          yet to open her eyes, and free from it all
         through rainwater fall, then out comes the sun
            If you decide to stay in the battle...
                     Sorrow forever done

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Written June 18th, 2004

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  • Yes She Bleeds Too
    July 28, 2004
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    i loved this poem! it's short but you managed to paint a beautiful picture with your words. great job, hun.
    ...muchlove... RIKKA

  • Silent Cries
    July 6, 2004
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    Hey,
    This poem is awesome!! I love your words..and the imagery! I Like how you expressed yourself.. ur very talented!! Keep rocking it..later

    lyl
    ~Jenn~


  • June 23, 2004
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    I really liked that. It flowed really well, and I liked the word choice and how you expressed emotion in it. Great write!!

    Stay strong, and don't give up.
    Caitlin <3