Laying here on the moistened earth
Wet from the dew drops of the early morning
Just before the sun peeks over the horizon
I gaze upon the vast sky
As the sparkling stars stare down at me
And the luminous moon smiles its dazzling smile
I sigh a breath
That slithers out of my mouth
And mix with the crisp air around me
I close my eyes,
and feel the slight breeze tickle me
like a feather barely touching your skin
Here and now
When no one has awoken
And the stars and moon above is the only light
And nothing stirs
but the tiny grass blades all around me
I am happy, I am content.
Author notes
lol, i know the background really doesn't go with the poem-but uh, that was the only one that was close enough. lol. nice contest.
Written June 18th, 2004
A contest entry
- Free Verse Nature by Hoosierpoet.
500 points, ended July 2, 2004, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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another very "grown-up" piece...I do believe you are 150!!!...you are a very talented person...freda
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A lot of great lines - wonderfully expressive and the images are exquisite. A lovely work. Thanks for entering my contest.
Best wishes,
Moses -
OMG!!! This is a first place for sure, and this time, I'm not just saying that! This was so beautiful... I really liked it, Spy! You should write nature-y stuff more often! I really loved your word usage... I didn't know you could talk like that, really.
Just kidding! Keep it up and good luck in the contest...
Kate
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Touché
I enjoyed the imagery, The dewdrops and a big smiling moon, good tripping material, and a suitable background, Touché! -
OMG are you right here! because i swear i can feel the breeze and hear you sighing! lol. wonderful write. very vivid in detail and image. loved it!
H-H -
Very good
One with the universe and the mother earth underneath. Breathing deeply the air of existence. Nice, peacefull poem.
Georges -
brillent! loved it. very descriptive, like a picture captured in my mind. nice flow also. great write.
good luck!
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--Johnny
Hi,
This was absolutly stunning! Your words painted a beautiful picture in my mind. The flow of this was excellent, and the imagery was quite vivid. This was just a lovely write my friend. Thanks for sharing and thanks for reading and commenting on my write
Good luck in the contest! This one looks like a winner!
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the last line... i can hear your happiness... i can hear your sigh... are you sure you are not just somewhere around close to my ear... invisibly beautiful... i like the mood of this poem, calm, quiet, soft...
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