Eagerness doth fill my emotions
Like the salt within the oceans
Words, many I have seen each day
Talked, we have about come what may
Tenderness and compassion felt with each write
Seeking out each others thoughts night after night
Waiting for a opportunity to present itself for us
Tempting fate until that day that I miss the bus
How will the wonderful moment find us at that time
Surely the elation shall reach a level that is sublime
Perhaps disappointment or regret will enter our thought
If for nothing else but having to leave and be distraught
My mind how it does race seeking the possibilities
Of our encounter and the things that strike similarities
Until that day I shall let my mind wonder as it will
Unknown thoughts leaving my heart with a hole to fill
Author notes
Written June 17th, 2004
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Enticing me to come a little closer are you, well let me just slide right up into the snuggling position...........OUCH.....Geez woman why did you go and ram that spout of the caulking gun in my heart? That wasnt even the hole but I think you managed to clog up a few arteries................I feel weak, now...........th.....tha.....than.....thank y.......tank yu.............passes out
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What a romantic, mushy guy you are eh? Who would have thought or is it thunk it...Well, i can fix you up! Not a problemo - you just move on in closer - yeah, that's right! Come on - don't be shy...come here closer to gal ...ok, hold it right there. I've got my caulking gun here and i've just caulked up that hole in your heart
Better now? Enjoyed this one! Thanks for sharing! 
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I appreciate the wonderful comment you wrote after reading this write Jennethepoet. Every once in a while words shall form upon my unsespecting conscious and those words flow out leaking unto lines from my hand......lol. I enjoy rhyming words and a write to relate something to your own mind. To me if I lead you down a road then you are seeing what I want you to see but if I show you the road and you find your own way down that road you shall see sights that attract your attention not the sights that I perhaps saw, though they may be the same, it was what you wanted to see. That may sound pretty crazy but that is the best analogy that I can give you on the way I try to write. I have an hour commute to and from work three days a week so I have time to think about things and that is where most of my writes start.
I shall have to get over to your page and see some of your writes. I enjoy seeing all the talent here at AP, as there are alot of great writers. Once again thank you for stopping in and having a read and take care. -
that poem was just wow, I felt everything you felt while I was reading this poem. I can tell when you write you just don't sit there and type anything; you put your heart into it. Now this is what I call a real poet. I also sit there and think before I type. If you do that then what is the since in writing you know what I mean? I see you have a lot of people on your list that you so much, I liked your poems and I am going to add you to my list. Well Keep up the great work
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I keep a big cork to plug up all the holes so none of me leaks onto the floor and makes a mess everywhere......lol. I appreciate you reading through this write and leaving your lovely thoughts here. I also appreciate the inspiration and shall keep the funnel handy to deposit the fluid of life back into the pumping chamber within my chest. Take care.
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Oh man, a hole in the heart is a very hard thing to fill. It seems it is always half empty, never being half full. I wish you luck in pouring life into it. Awesome poem. I enjoyed it. You are very talented.
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Thank you for reading and commenting on my write. I appreciate you taking the time to leave me a message of what you thought. I really like rhyming poetry and find myself thinking in rhyming ways through out the day......lol. Thanx for stopping in and take care.
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It is great i really like ur ryming.
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You are too gracious and kind to me with your lovely comments kjack. I do appreciate that you find some pleasure in my writes. I too enjoy love poems though I keep wondering if the trial parts should also go into them to see where this love has been and if we could speculate on the length of its course. I appreciate you reading through this and replying to it. Thank you and take care.
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Cant slide nothing past you can I macandrew....lol. Perhaps it was a wishful thought of something that might have happened. Or perhaps just the insane ramblings of one crazy mans thoughts. I do appreciate your comment and thank you for stopping in to have a read. Take care.
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Alright now I think it is you that needs that fadora and the trenchcoat, mahogany desk and a pair of loafers to go along with that sherlock holmes hat......lol. I also think that you have asked a quite nifty question, and one I havent the foggiest clue to. I think one could speculate, therin leaving gravity to fall upon the shoulders of those that actually undertake the task of finding out.
I really appreciate your notes on my works each time you leave them. I thought that this whole piece was kinda forced and it seemed kinda choppy to me but I let it stand unrefined and displayed it for what it was.
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Thank you Queen though I think love is a relative term to the moment in which it finds you starstruck wondering if you are still drooling or have actually wiped away the spittal. I really have come to believe that love is more often then not replaced with complacency. I do still dream that little dream though. I really appreciate you reading through this write and enjoying it. Thank you for the comment and take care.
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All I can say is beautiful. I do love this poem, but then again I love all of your writes. You have a brilliant mind. Love poems are so wonderful. They just seem to get me all jittery inside. Damn, I hate it when they do that. Great write nonetheless. I did enjoy the read.
becca
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very well done
I had the feeling this was an internet relationship ready to go the next level. A wonderful write. Very smooth and comforting to read.
Very well done.
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Hmmmmm.....love is in the air....a musing about what may be...with a touch of apprehension I think. Is reality ever as good as the imagination? Earth is heavier than heady emotional air, but with the right people, all things are possible.
You've done a nice job rhyming this piece. One or two places strike me as slightly forced, but not to an extreme and certainly not to detract from the expressed sentiments.
I love the two opening lines -- very well done!
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Sounds to me like you are in love, excellent poem my friend. Your rhyming is very good. I love it. Queen
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