Aeons spent dreaming
seeking truth and finding only lies
existing, but not alive
Waiting, silent and alone
beneath oceans of despair
bound by cold iron chains
oppression of self
held still by fear
wallowing
in self pity,
and silently waiting
like precious stones
to be discovered
plucked from filth,
polished to a brilliant shine
and then admired,
adored and exalted.
Author notes
This says a lot as to how I was feeling these past years of my life. This was written in a moment of clarity, as I saw for the first time how wrong I was about life. I didn't appreciate myself, or my place in the universe.
Written June 17th, 2004
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Diamons in the ruft, cool. But before you can shine you have to do something yourself not let someone else do it for you, or your just a blackened stone covered in slime. I love the poem. I give it a 9.3. -
sometimes we all refuse to appriciate ourselves...
for some of us it just takes time!
Yes...
I've been there myself.
so I know where you are speaking from.
Take care my friend!
I did enjoy this!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
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oh man... i cant even do a decent comment on this one cus i liked it so much... you seem to have such a seamless way of putting together a seamless story and making it very ..even from beginning to end, you very good at transformation i guess. But im gload your comment was so optimistic.. cus the poem bu itself is almost depressing.. just it ends with waiting. ROCKIN!!!!
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dude this was great, your word choice and imagery is like that of a professional poet..
like precious stones
to be discovered
plucked from filth,
polished to a brilliant shine
Thos lines were so great, because they're true, but they fir in with the whole theme of your poem so very well...great great poem...
much love and respect
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Very good. I love all the metaphores... you sure have a good feel for words. Congratulations and give us more
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Very expressive, good writing.. amazing flow with the words all coming down to one meaning.. a little dissapointed since I was so blown away from the last one I read.. but as a single writing.. this was good.. but as a style overall.. your are amazing.
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Wow- this is a great piece with a great title
I like the words you used and the emotion, especially the change in emotion. This is a very well-written piece. Well done
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Well, the title of your poem grabbed me. Then I saw the poem, I was even more captivated. I was caught completely unaware by the vivid images floating through this one. With every word, branded onto the page to let our imagination set soar. That is what happen to me here while reading this.
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The title of this poem attracted me to it.. the flow of this is absolutely perfect, and the words produced such great imagery and emotion.. I really liked this poem. I read it out loud, just to see how it sounded.. very nice, and I hope to read more of your work
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aww this is really great. The wording you chose was amazing, and really helped convey how you felt... i can tell that you pulled this straight from your heart... great job, thanx for sharing!
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well done
this is wildly creative and a poetically genius piece!! no doubt,you have a true gift for seeing such beauty and putting it into brilliant and sensible words!! keep up the great work,like i always say,you are one of my fav poets,because you exceed the norm,and you have a deeper meaning and truth in your poetry which i adore and admire!! hugs and great goin,poetic janis/dani -
Beautiful. You feel as if you are beautiful, but unappreciated, unadored and unknown. Lovely wording and sadly deep meaning.
Another great write from the hollow depths of Arkhayne's heart. I hope that you find the fulfillment that you have been so desparately seeking. -
wow, this is beautiful hun. sounds like you're describing yourself... or someone you know very well. Great great write hun.
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I can't help but wonder what its all a metaphor for... but your word choices were very beautiful... very well thought. Actually some of the lines you used, I've used in my poetry before... just a couple though. Not that it has anything to do with anything. Anyway, what I especially liked about this poem was how your words twists as they are read aloud... really gave me an overall feel for the lines
beneath oceans of despair
bound by cold iron chains
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i love this it is so cool!
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