i am left here
with empty hands
and an empty heart
waiting,
for what i'm not sure,
maybe closure
i expected
my adolescence to end
with a bang
instead of a whimper
waiting for someone
to say "it'll be alright"
and hoping,
perhaps beyond hope,
that this time
i will believe them
Author notes
Written June 16th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Graduation Time by tenshihijimushi.
300 points, ended May 26, 2006, 12 entries
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I KNOW that I've read this before.
I might not have commented, but I remember the same feeling after I read it the first time.
How strange that I would get it again...
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This poem is different from what I usually read about graduation. It focuses more on the sad, lonely side of graduation rather than the happy side. I like this darker side a lot. Great work and good luck in the contest!
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Interesting view on graduation, one I don't normally see. Always refreshing to see an old topic taken on with new insight.
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You wrote here very simply, what most people feel when ending teen years. The "what now" thoughts have loomed heavily over most of us at that stage in life. Teen relationships often end and we are not sure how to approach our life with those past experiences so fresh. No point anyone saying "it will be alright", only experience teaches us that. All we can do is stick with life one day at a time and things change within us, usually for the better with the wisdom of age and experience. This is a well written piece. I found it poignant in the emotions it arose in me.
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everything will be alright. dont worry, i know what u mean, i also just graduated and i think most everyones question is "now what?" i suppose we'll jsut take it as it comes and hope for the best. what else is there to do? and youll be young for longer than u may think
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Good
Very Good write!!
~d0m1n1c -
It will be alright
I just thought I'd say that to you, because it's true.... everything will be all right. May take some time.. and some hard work, but it will happen. I felt "emptiness" with the words you've written here, a real sad feeling too. Good write, the feel of emotions is just right, and the way in which you've penned it is great. Excellent job!!
~Aimee
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The simple word choice and form fit the mood. We tend to make such a big deal out of "milestones" in our lives that when they actually happen it's anticlimactic. Remember change is good.
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*nods* right there with ya
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Nicely Done
The idea of graduation is so exciting until it approaches, then it becomes scary. Graduation represents change, the change we’re not sure we want to see. You truly express the emotions that come with change, the turbulence and terror, as well as the weakness. We all need someone to promise us that everything will be okay, we’re all still very much children. I hope you can find a way to still this turbulence, and promise yourself everything will be alright. Nice write. -
That's probably how I'll be when I graduate--except I'll want to get away at the same time. There is comfort in being in high school, in being where mom and dad can always be there for you and you know everyone else. Watching seniors leave every year is hard when you start becoming attached to them; each year it just gets harder for me. Two years left and I'm gone. It's insane. Your emotions made sense to me, and you wrote them so well. Great work.
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To some people graduation can be hard. For me it was no different. I already had my own house and husband. So I couldn't wait.
The rule of thumb is that what ever seems bad at the moment will only get easier to digest as the days go by.
Sorry you were so disappointed.
Your poem was very well written. Thanks for sharing it!
Chrissy
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good to nkow someone understands, thanks
~Kate -
Awesome. I bet it is hard to graduate. great write, keep it up.
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wow
this is a gret write i dont understand what your feelingb/c i have nver been there but you make it come out through writing to seem as if i had
keep it up
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I had to read this...two times. The title just brings more onto how you feel about one of the most important and best things that can happen to anybody. But, there is a loss even with the greatest of things, sometimes. I graduated last month from high school and I just feel the same like...things were supposed to be different, but it's all the same. I expected too much, I think, and got nothing. So, this poem really explains a lot, it's so great.
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I like this piece. It is very neat. I think you did more than excellent on this one. It sure was a pleasure to read. Keep up the good work. You have a wonderful day. may God bless you and protect you. May he give to you more thoughts to share. Thank you so much for sharing. Take care...
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Very simple, but it holds alot of emotion. I can't say how much I like this-I can't find words, so I'll just applaud you.
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