On a walk one day with my guide
I once stepped upon a stone.
A stone that filled me with pride,
For upon it sat a throne.
For as I began to see,
To me, there was something beholden.
It had presented itself before, to me,
But it was in the days of olden.
Yet this was no ordinary throne of just a king,
It was the throne of someone I had known before.
As he led the way, into the ring,
A ring of gold upon his head, he wore.
A light shown from that ring of his,
And my guide said to him, I must listen.
For his words they spoke of many a bliss,
And afterwards, they did glisten.
For it was as if they hung in the air,
Lingering beyond past things remembered.
Things which didn’t matter there,
My guide said our days are numbered.
The voice boomed loudly, yet easily listened,
For his voice was gentle, yet powerful.
As his words hung around, they glistened,
And full of grace, and wisdom so wonderful.
A message he did give of my soul,
One of days to come, and dreaded events.
My spirit guide, speaks of times of ole,
And new things to come, he presents.
© Jonathan Wikkins May 12, 2002
Revised March 3, 2008
All Rights Reserved
Author notes
Written May 12th, 2002
In a list
A contest entry
- The Best of All Your Rhymes by One Angry Monkey.
600 points, ended February 11, 2008, 16 entries
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Thanks for the entry Jonathan. Its got a lot of merrit and it's not easy to rhyme in alternating couplet like that. But I found the meter was a little off in places and the use f the word "for" at the start of many lines was a little destracting, as if you were scrambling for an extra syllabol. Thanks for the read.
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Excellent write here you have honey I would say that this poem is very very profound indeed thank you for shareing it
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Great piece
A wonderful piece of poetry, makes one wonder, keep'em coming!
I have got to say, you've got my attention with this write!
You take care and thanks so much for sharing!
-Timothy -
GREATLY GOOD
this speeks true to me becasue i have spirt gides that tell me things off the wind like peoples thoughts and worries that the speek over thier shoulder when i windwalk the world seems so difrent the trees and the universe seem to speek to me i like it keep up the good work -
7.5/10
I didn't much care for the ending of this line:
'But it was in the days of olden.'
To me that line sounded a bit what a beginner would write. But, that is my opinion.
Other than that, a good piece here.
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don't touch it!
This is so beautiful and I believe every word. We all have a guide if we only choose to look and listen.
Von :) -
don't touch it!
Ahhhh yes yes yes - love it -
excellent
I like your words here, they are almost like a magic spell, and have real substance. Very nice work indeed! -
excellent
enjoy the journey
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excellent
quite interesting... m -
don't touch it!
Great write, you expressed it very well in this of your communications with your spirit guide. I have much more to say on this, More then this site will understand, more then they should hear, only words that should be seen by you. -
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Very nice work. I thought it was exciting, and fruiteful.
I thought it was deep, and complex.. and everything was expressed and show very well, and very bluntly with a fantastic flow, and wonderful understandings.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Shelly.
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