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Dull Talons

I can see the window
You open it to let me fly in
To see the love that is within
But I have flown too fast
And the glass has shattered
Gone before we had time to begin

Upon a final shard I am perched
Before the opening you placed a screen
A blockade that is in between
I am not quite sure
Which of us put it there
Its presence to me is unclean

I cannot rip away at it
Or will I even hope to try
To help the two of us get by
I leave my perch and fly around
Hoping to find another window
For now and ever goodbye

For now and ever goodbye

Author notes

I have written this song to a good friend whose relationship has shattered recently.  She told me that she saw a painting and told me a whole interpretation about it.
Written June 15th, 2004

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  • Boe
    June 17, 2004
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    Great write! Best of luck in the contest!

    Excelent write! Very good imaginary and it makes you think. I really enjoyed reading this piece. Thanks for entering. Keep up the great work and best of luck to you in the contest!!!!!

    ---BOE---


  • riffkarose
    June 15, 2004
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    goos work

    nice. i also take partial credit for the philosophy. Some odd words here and there.Thanks for putting my thoughts into a poem.Also thanks for standing by me through all my problems and not (always) giving up)even sometimes when you should have.Thanks


  • Medea
    June 15, 2004
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    me encanta el poema

    nice. i take partial credit for the philosophy. interestingly put, altho it did not have the entire interpretation in it. i dont understand this line, "Its presence to me is unclean" explain por favor.